Published April 9, 2012
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The first thing I notice is the formatting. Right now it just looks like a couple of sentences. Try formatting it like this?
Now for the nitty gritty…
Okay it should be ‘And’ instead of ‘d’. A full stop is necessary rather than an ellipsis. My problem with this is it’s obvious. Obviously the past is behind and the future is ahead. I don’t see the point of this.
Okay I suggest some minor changes. Perhaps it could read:
Live in the present
Is all there is to do.
I think you mean ‘In order to defeat the obstacles in life.’
Honestly I don’t understand this poem, could you perhaps explain it?
Hey..
Nice poem, but I suggest (for next time) writing the poem more neatly.... Make "the" instead of "d".... You're too cool to do that!? LOL
Just Kidding.
Brief and true!
Always nice to use both as one for a change.
Keep Writing,
VNT Quest.