Published April 24, 2012
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Howdy!
I'm going to review your work for you!
I just don't think because is the best word to use here. Neither does human need to be capitalised.
Other than that this is a fantastic poem. It flows so well. Imagery is used perfectly. It's describing, if I'm correct, someone who was once human; who was human at the beginning, going through a change. Perhaps turing into a vampire or something along that track?
Keep writing, your work is brilliant! You wrote about something so popular but you made it unique and your own.
Hauntingly poetic dude. Rock on.