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Young Writers Society



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by drinkonthemoon


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Sun Feb 24, 2013 10:20 pm
silentpatronus wrote a review...



Howdy ☺

I’m going to review your work! ☺

I think this is a really unique concept and is very good!

Only one small nitpick

with that strange liqueur,


‘With’ needs to be capitalised.

I must say, this is a beautiful poem. It’s a very good length and is to the point. The subject is rarely written about!

How did you come up with the idea?




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Mon Jan 07, 2013 12:10 am
Morrigan wrote a review...



Wow. This gave me shivers.
"I should have caught the syllables in a jar
and pickled them till summer"
Is going to be stuck in my head for a long time.
I have one suggestion for change: put a line break in the sixth line between "open" and "the." It will scan better.
You have quite a talent. Very nice.




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Sun Nov 11, 2012 3:04 pm
pinkbookworm says...



this is really good.I am really impressed by your style of writing.....i will remember this for quite some time :):):):)





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