silented1

Well just reading the rhyme it goes aabbccddeefffgghhii. May I ask why there are 3 F's in the middle? Is that part of some style or whatever?(Forgive the unprofessionalism but ...

You're first stanza seems out of sort with the rest of the poem. And you ask lot of questions, but you don't give a lot of answers. also your poem ...

OH! What bias can you find in one piece! Speaking as a guy, I'd like to say NOT EVERY GUY is like that, naturally. On to my review. So this ...

When you use that's the thing in the first stanza(3rd line) It's weird because you didn't set up for it right... It's like you skipped a line... In the second ...

Its short, so there won't be much to say. I'd love for this to get a setting and place and a story. If you add those 2 with this you ...

What I don't like is how wordy it is. You have a lot of words here that just create boring images for me. You have good use of personification, when ...

Imagry would be nice. Metaphores too(well more).Similes would work well here to. You want to make it as much of a thrill living as you do writing that the reader ...

Your flow is nice. I like the transition from distance to one's self then back to the distance theme. Somethings I don't like: Such as your phrasing."Moments from now I'll ...

What I don't like is that there isn't much of a message to it... For me atleast...And I didn't like how you said "A moment in time/ There's a moment ...

What I didn't like was that there was little smooth transition from the darkness to the light and all the things inbetween... What I did like was that it slowly ...

Why not good bye ethan? For a title... If you're looking or a title that is. You should capitalize all or none of your I's in a poem. ""i'll never ...

Either yo have a lot of approximate rhyme or I am just not seeing it. Now then. Whose leaving? Why? When? And how/why do you know this person isn't coming ...

Grrr its small so there might not be a lot for me to say...Anyways. I love how you never say that the person is gone, nor that you miss them... ...

very repetitive...gets a tad annoying in fact. and on line 16, it should be you're not you'r(first grammatical fix by me ever!!) now if you broke this up into stanzas, ...

its small... so I won't have much to say... a bit of questions and a bit of answering, no where do you "own" a piece of this poem Kate. I ...