Published December 31, 2009
Boys,
Obnoxious,
Loud,
Annoying,
Flirting,
Violent…
Josh,
Kind,
Calm,
Welcoming,
Loving,
Handsome…
I think I know which one I prefer…..
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I like it. Short, sweet, conveying emotion. One little nitpick. Nix the ellipsis after violent and have Josh be a statement with a period. like so
Then Josh has more impact and it looks better aesthetically.
Besides that, keep up the good work.
(DO you really have a true love, and is his name really josh?)
xxooxx
The Universe
Ok I'm sorry silented1 but ..uh...she's mainly right..
(girls can too btw)
hahaha not all boys are like that but all boys CAN be like that..
its a nice piece...ha..keep up the good work...
Sorry, i didn't mean to offend any other boys. I am just speaking of pretty much every boy i have ever met. Sorry again, but thanks for viewing/commenting!
OH! What bias can you find in one piece! Speaking as a guy, I'd like to say NOT EVERY GUY is like that, naturally. On to my review.
So this is a love piece, eh? About how Josh is different from other boys?
Well you should give more imagery and tell us more on how this josh fellow means to you.
And what the other boys mean to you for comparison. It'd givea nice story.
Also one thing I do like is that is hrt and sweet and to the point. Points for knowing wht I like. Lol.
Other than that it's okay. Keep it up.