shusher

I very much relate to change being a big issue. As it is I'm getting ready to move. The change looks nice, but where I'm at is also nice, and ...

The thing about the sea with the friend drowning I thought was so funny, I wrote it in my dowry. Everything here is a pain, to the character, I mean. ...

Hey, I really appreciate the advice and the essay as a whole. I've been telling my friends about your challenge and all who have reported of the results were unsuccessful ...

Main key points: Description is an absolute must. There's not a lot of anchoring plot points. Okay, I mentioned this as a comment in the first chapter, using pronouns at ...

"'who would this be from," I wondered." 'I wondered' isn't necessary, and best to avoid, he-said/she-said phrases in the future. "I tried to open it, but it didn't." This sentence ...

Here to review your stuff. You seem to have been very fond of your cat. Is the cat rising from the grave? What do you mean by 'clouds'? Is silver, ...

1st read through: your syllable count is all over the place, and it's hard for me to hear the music to it, that is to say it's hard to recite. ...

1) background looks like Dark Siders. 2) life breath, why one word? 3) I'm guessing this is talking about blood flow within the body, the roads being veins, and marrow ...

Intro: I really like poetry. I really like adventure. So, this type of thing strikes a special vain. Then, imagery well written like this... well, I won't get too romantic ...

1) I appreciate the mentioning of me. It's very sweet 2) Sorry I've not been on in a while. School finals, and then worked doubles. I'll be a little bit ...

I also struggle with empathy, and here I empathize at the lack of empathy emphatically. When I read this, I thought, "Exactly! This person understands me." With this poem, there's ...

Joel here for a review! Here's some things I think might help, and some things I really enjoyed "...still cared," would flow better rhythmically without 'still' 'god's' I'm assuming is ...

Whow. These line breaks are super good! You split all the lines up in a way that, "Savor the sweet taste of... this poem." I can so relate to falling ...

The language is REALLY strong, and most of the words start losing their impact when this happens. I did a small chuckle at the end. One thing I'd really like ...

Yep. I don't know how to delete a message, but I want my review points dangit. So here it is again. There's a couple grammatical errors at the beginning. "Wherever ...