Yo Arc, let's try and knock this poem out of the GR eh? So I must admit that it feels a bit weird reviewing your poetry, I think this is my first time doing it and feeling somewhat under qualified too, but we'll see how it goes. I've really quite enjoyed your series of poems based off paintings, it's slightly different to the voice you have when you're writing poems by itself. It's more lyrical, softer I suppose. The imagery in this poem is lovely, the words themselves seem to flow like the winding roads where one thought ends just as another begins. I think my favourite line is just,
no cartographycan map this - you're a piece of infinity
'roads run through you'
'you're a piece of infinity'
'deep in your soul's marrow'
This is so powerful and beautiful. Good job!!!
1) background looks like Dark Siders.2) life breath, why one word? 3) I'm guessing this is talking about blood flow within the body, the roads being veins, and marrow being the explicit piece.Anyways, it was pretty interesting. I don't get the part about infinity/eternity, and I'm lost at the mirror. I'm guessing that's the 2nd beat in a given heartbeat? I don't know.
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