Hey there! It's ZeldaIsShiek here to review another quintessential piece of literature that made my day and win this Review Day by helping the Red Pandas stay in first place and reaching my goal of 80 reviews. I might even get to 100, if I work hard enough. I am really excited to review this amazing piece of art that you have created, and maybe add some witty humor as well. Anyway, that's enough idle chatter from me. Let's get into the review.I enjoyed the interesting backdrop, making the meaning a little bit easier to come across. However, I will not be talking about meaning very much in today's review. Today I am going to be writing about your wording itself and why it works so well in this poem's case.Linking something your body has with something your soul has is a very unique technique that not a lot of people do. You use the term 'marrow' to describe the inside of the bones of your soul. You use the roads as an example of paths shooting through you, while stating that these paths are unable to be charted and that only you can follow what you think is your destiny, and only you know what you want. As Lao Tzu once said, "At the center of your being you have the answer; you know who you are and you know what you want.” Your poem was extravagant and I could not write a better piece in one thousand years.That's all for today. Keep writing amazing literature that inspires me to read and review them, and have a great Review Day! Let's beat the Blues once and for all!~ZeldaIsShiek
Yo Arc, let's try and knock this poem out of the GR eh? So I must admit that it feels a bit weird reviewing your poetry, I think this is my first time doing it and feeling somewhat under qualified too, but we'll see how it goes. I've really quite enjoyed your series of poems based off paintings, it's slightly different to the voice you have when you're writing poems by itself. It's more lyrical, softer I suppose. The imagery in this poem is lovely, the words themselves seem to flow like the winding roads where one thought ends just as another begins. I think my favourite line is just,
no cartographycan map this - you're a piece of infinity
'roads run through you'
'you're a piece of infinity'
'deep in your soul's marrow'
This is so powerful and beautiful. Good job!!!
1) background looks like Dark Siders.2) life breath, why one word? 3) I'm guessing this is talking about blood flow within the body, the roads being veins, and marrow being the explicit piece.Anyways, it was pretty interesting. I don't get the part about infinity/eternity, and I'm lost at the mirror. I'm guessing that's the 2nd beat in a given heartbeat? I don't know.
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