seekingthetruth

thanks so much and yh this did get sent to her

was their anything good about it? sorry it just seems rather negative

sorry it was because I was in a rush to get to school but I will continue with this at some point

I would suggest going into some detail about the spiders web - use imagery to describe the shapes. that's all seekingthetruth out

oh cool great

ok .. I think

thank you so much I used this poem in an exam and got a a 9 witch is a Astar

your so welcome your really talented don't let it go to waste be magnificnant and strong

sorry if you hated it but I thought it was quite good

if you use repetition then it highlights the emotive lauange

so even though I have dyslexia you are not going to apolgise then you are no writer your a coward

I bloody have dyslexia so please don't take the mik pljus my laptop is supposed to spell check but from this sentence it does not

really exciting ready for the next chapter. but a few points are that maybe just maybe you should perhaps consider starting again and making your charatecters less basic and more ...

very good at setting the scene made me feel like I was watching this play out. just a few tips to help. its good but I think you need to ...

thanks so much