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  • Short Story » Historical Fiction, General Re: A Christmas tale

    Hey there, here's a quick review. :) It's a lovely piece, to be honest. I have a suggestion though, perhaps you'd like to edit this bit? “Well, did you go?” ...

    Dec 19, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: they all go marching

    That was a sad ending. :( Review: I think the starting alphabets of your stanzas (at least) should be capitalized. Oh, and remember to capitalise the alphabet after a period. ...

    Apr 2, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Alone

    Didn't find any errors, so I'll just make this a super quick review. :) I really enjoyed reading this. It was a very gripping read. Just a question though. What's ...

    Mar 29, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: The Darkest Light

    Hey, here's a quick review. :) Hate is a terriable feeling Hate is a terriable sight to behold Spelling error. Terrible . Feel It for the people I thought love ...

    Mar 23, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: River

    Hey there! Welcome to YWS, Ambe! Just a quick reminder: Since you've posted one piece of work, you should review two pieces of work. It'll replenish your points, and allow ...

    Mar 23, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re:

    One story that I have been told, Tells of Pebbles, brave and bold. Stands behind the garden shed, Slowly, slowly, raises his head. A hero's mask upon his face, He ...

    Mar 21, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: A New Born Killer - Deleted

    Hey, this was a good poem. I'll nitpick at some things though. I feel i've been contaminated. I 've . And the line should be, ' I feel like I've ...

    Mar 17, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: I miss you John

    Hey there. It's good to pour your emotions out and not bottle them up. (This statement is only applicable if this poem is a true story.) So, here's a review. ...

    Mar 17, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Those 3 words.

    Maybe it's your avatar's influence, but I had an image of a beach and a couple on a hammock while I was reading this. So, anyway, review time. The moon ...

    Mar 17, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: An ode to 9/11

    Hey there. I'll be quoting your poem in made-up stanzas, so it's easier to read. :) And to the terror for which it speaks a rolling bellow now beseaks For ...

    Mar 16, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: deleted

    Hey there. Just a quick review here. Where the words are written but their not spoken Where the words are written but they're not spoken And you don't have to ...

    Mar 11, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Self-Actualization

    Hey. The font size makes it look pretty, but unfortunately, it's a little hard to read. Saw that you're thinking of deleting your account. It'll be a pity if you ...

    Mar 11, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Nightmare

    Hey there. I'm breaking the whole poem down into stanzas. It'll be easier to read and spot things. :) Everything will be OK. Ill open my eyes another day. Tears ...

    Mar 11, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: The Meaning of Life

    Hey there. Here's a quick review. Trapped in this body, about to explode, Gunna spread my soul throughout this world, Without seconds thoughts, or even a doubt, Flowing with the ...

    Mar 5, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: We all knew it

    Hey there. I'm going to make a guess and say that this poem is about a strained relationship that finally came to an end? That was the impression I got ...

    Feb 28, 2011


The adjective should reinvent the noun.
— Leslie Norris