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Re: A Christmas tale
Hey there, here's a quick review. :) It's a lovely piece, to be honest. I have a suggestion though, perhaps you'd like to edit this bit? “Well, did you go?” ...
Dec 19, 2011 -
Re: they all go marching
That was a sad ending. :( Review: I think the starting alphabets of your stanzas (at least) should be capitalized. Oh, and remember to capitalise the alphabet after a period. ...
Apr 2, 2011 -
Re: Alone
Didn't find any errors, so I'll just make this a super quick review. :) I really enjoyed reading this. It was a very gripping read. Just a question though. What's ...
Mar 29, 2011 -
Re: The Darkest Light
Hey, here's a quick review. :) Hate is a terriable feeling Hate is a terriable sight to behold Spelling error. Terrible . Feel It for the people I thought love ...
Mar 23, 2011 -
Re: River
Hey there! Welcome to YWS, Ambe! Just a quick reminder: Since you've posted one piece of work, you should review two pieces of work. It'll replenish your points, and allow ...
Mar 23, 2011 -
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One story that I have been told, Tells of Pebbles, brave and bold. Stands behind the garden shed, Slowly, slowly, raises his head. A hero's mask upon his face, He ...
Mar 21, 2011 -
Re: A New Born Killer - Deleted
Hey, this was a good poem. I'll nitpick at some things though. I feel i've been contaminated. I 've . And the line should be, ' I feel like I've ...
Mar 17, 2011 -
Re: I miss you John
Hey there. It's good to pour your emotions out and not bottle them up. (This statement is only applicable if this poem is a true story.) So, here's a review. ...
Mar 17, 2011 -
Re: Those 3 words.
Maybe it's your avatar's influence, but I had an image of a beach and a couple on a hammock while I was reading this. So, anyway, review time. The moon ...
Mar 17, 2011 -
Re: An ode to 9/11
Hey there. I'll be quoting your poem in made-up stanzas, so it's easier to read. :) And to the terror for which it speaks a rolling bellow now beseaks For ...
Mar 16, 2011 -
Re: deleted
Hey there. Just a quick review here. Where the words are written but their not spoken Where the words are written but they're not spoken And you don't have to ...
Mar 11, 2011 -
Re: Self-Actualization
Hey. The font size makes it look pretty, but unfortunately, it's a little hard to read. Saw that you're thinking of deleting your account. It'll be a pity if you ...
Mar 11, 2011 -
Re: Nightmare
Hey there. I'm breaking the whole poem down into stanzas. It'll be easier to read and spot things. :) Everything will be OK. Ill open my eyes another day. Tears ...
Mar 11, 2011 -
Re: The Meaning of Life
Hey there. Here's a quick review. Trapped in this body, about to explode, Gunna spread my soul throughout this world, Without seconds thoughts, or even a doubt, Flowing with the ...
Mar 5, 2011 -
Re: We all knew it
Hey there. I'm going to make a guess and say that this poem is about a strained relationship that finally came to an end? That was the impression I got ...
Feb 28, 2011
