Published March 22, 2011
Hate
Hate is a terrible feeling
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~sniff, sniff~ thank you so much. You really made me day ;D
This quote is so true. There's so much hate in the world that some people feel it's the only option. We need more Love in this world, which is why I chose my signature (below). This poem is like the cry of the coming generation. I think your words would open a lot of people's eyes. It would show them the impact hate is having on the youth.
Thank for your review. Im not really that good with writing poems but when its about my feelings words just spill out and I have to hurry up and write it down before I forget it ;D
What a true poem. Though there were some spelling errors, i liked it very much. Many people feel that way, but i haven't heardanyone express it that well in words. Nice overall idea of teenage essence.
Thanks for the review I will look at all the mistakes and edit it.
Hey, here's a quick review.
Spelling error. Terrible.
No need to capitalise 'i' for 'it'.
Use it for the lies and betrayals
Stuck between good and evil,
andthere I am.Right between it all
Is where I stand.
My heart pounds to make the right choice,
but there isn't one.
There's no need to repeat 'right choice'.
Don't forget your apostraphes. And spelling.
There's only Hate
So my heart consumes it all
What's left when you consume all the hate in the world?
There's only one thing you become
I'd suggest ending your poem with a period.
'An Avenger.'
It'll give it more impact.
Be careful with your spelling. And remember to use apostraphes when necessary. For eg. It is= It's. There is= There's. Be careful not to capitalise letters unnecessarily.
I didn't really understand the whole poem though.
Why would you feel hate for those who love you?
Are you torn between choosing whether or not to hate someone?
With some polishing up, this poem would be really good. Keep writing!