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Hey, nycto! Welcome to YWS! Now, about your poem. :) Nitpicks: I don't know if you were going for the all-lowercase thing, but I think you should change "i" to ...

Bashland, Positive comments: I loved the honesty you portrayed in this poem. The stanzas and verses also flowed nicely together. Nitpicks and suggestions: Maybe some more description? I think this ...

Rhia, First of all, your format is perfect for the rhythm of the poem. Second, the name definitely compliments the story (I love when people choose subtle names for their ...

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Hey Weymouth! I enjoyed this poem and while I do like free verse, I found myself liking the rhyme you put in there. However, I think there's a few things ...

Iggy- The imagery in your poem was fantastic. I was in LoVE with the whole metaphor you had going on there. I have one stupid suggestion. It's just that I ...

Percybeth!

Elinor- "Where I flop against my pillow each nigh." Night. That is the only nitpick I have. I definitely enjoyed your poem; the sense of leaving the past behind while ...

Can I just pretend that this poem is mine? Please? Penprincess, I loved your similes and personification; they made me smile. When I got to the end and realized that ...

Monsters- "artless symphonies"---Love the title. I had to read this twice only because its meaning seemed so profound. Your last line gave me a lot to think about. The only ...

Jas, :-) I thought your poem was interesting. I have to say that I did not enjoy the capitalization. It was unique, but it fet like you were yelling it ...

@JasperCollins, I agree with everything you've said about this poem. @Percybeth, what an amazing poem!!! I love this one even better than your last one! I loved the whole tomorrow ...

bluedragon, I absolutely adore this poem. At first I thought, this is totally cliché, and then I think, but it that what you (as the narrator of the poem) want ...

Percybeth :-), This is what your poem made me think of: At first, it made me think of you (as the narrator) sitting at the top of a tree, where ...

I can relate to this, since I am almost literally in love with music (and I would probably marry it if I could :)). Music really does free us, and ...