paintingtherain97

Oh my God, I love this! Your language was absolutely perfect, with great imagery. I liked the part about spinning concrete webs of lies. It was pretty epic. And the ...

This is really good. And what you said in the beginning, about it maybe being in the wrong category, I think it probably goes into dramatic poetry because it's first ...

This is so good. I like the use of sort of old language, and the dramatic, suspenseful mood.The figuarative language added to the drama, using a lion as a symbol ...

This is great. I like the metaphoric language, like when you said that you are a phoenix, although you spelled phoenix wrong I think. It's a good comparison, symbolizing revirth ...

When I read the title, I thought, "Oh, God, another depressing suicidal poem." But it wasn't like that. It's good. I love the way you started each stanza with the ...

This is good, but I think I have a few tips to make it better. The syllabic balance is good, and the voice of the narrator seems genuine, although I ...

This is good, aside from a few little things. Check your punctauation. Some of the sentences were broken into two lines by a period, when it should be a comma, ...

This is really good. The lines rhyme and flow well, with balanced syllabic content, and I don't see anything grammatically wrong; I think that the overall format is good. Also, ...

This is good, melodramatic in a good way. It was, however, a bit confusing. I can't tell if this is about a death that is so long and painful that ...

This is really awesome. I've thought about writing a poem with this message, but I couldn't figure out how to word it. You pulled it off perfectly, with your ending. ...

These are good. I really liked the first one. There were a hell of a lot of similes. The message is really relatable, too, trying to figure out the standards ...

Not bad. The flow and syllabic balance was good. I think you could spice it up with some metaphors, though. Angry people tend to be red-faced and indignant. You could ...

This is good. You can definitely feel the raging insolence of Holy teachings, the angst and the anger at what should not be. The flow is good, and the emotion ...

This is beautiful. It talks about a topic that people try to ignore too much. The emotion in it is real, and it is unique in its truthfulness. The capitalization ...

This is great!!! It's exactly how I feel a lot of the time, complex and hard for even me to understand. I like this. I think I saw one little ...