Published August 18, 2011
Anger in the faces of many,
Cloudy, dumbfound, and unsure.
Why, May I ask?
For the answer in clear and near.
Forward, onward, ever onward,
closer towards a greater understanding.
Control in itself, wonderous bliss.
Heinous thoughts always amiss.
Yet, without control, none to be shown,
the horrors become obvious
as the anger in the faces of many.
Another poem I wrote a few days ago. Was looking at a picture of an angry face. Made me giggle. Still does, cause I drew it.
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Hi there!
This is a really good poem. It flows well and there aren't any grammer or spelling errors that I found. You did a great job describing the point you were trying to get across. You didn't have a rhyme scheme, so I can't comment on that.
Overall this is a good poem. Keep writing!
Not bad. The flow and syllabic balance was good. I think you could spice it up with some metaphors, though. Angry people tend to be red-faced and indignant. You could try to show this by comparing the color of their faces to tomatoes or blood perhaps. As for the indignance, maybe a situation that would make someone indignant typically, like waiting in line at the DMV for too long. Also, you never really made much of an imprint in my brain with the poem. I don't know if you, as the poet, are asking why people are angry, or if you're esplaining why and doing poorly at it. Anyway, nice poem. If you try to improve it, it could be a lot better too. I give it a thumbs up. Keep writing and I'll keep reading and reviewing. I hope that my review helps.
I found this very well written. Keep it up!