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Interesting piece here. I could pick it apart I suppose, but it's so interesting that I would rather just talk about what I got from it. I think that is ...

Hey there! Okay so you have a very interesting topic here, and it really could be great with a lot of work. I'm assuming you are open to suggestions though ...

Scanning over your piece, I saw some good and bad! Honestly you should consider formatting it a little better. It gets distracting to read with no space between the lines, ...

Hello :) This is great! A few things I'll point out, both positive and then things you could always work on. "I hugged my arms for warmth. It was winter, ...

This was great! I love, love, love how you introduced this woman and who she was through back flashes and her life style now. The beginning is great because it ...

We will start from the top: "I was so happy to see Jake again; I hadn't seen him all summer." --how about: "All summer Jake (insert reason he was gone ...

In this chapter I think it is important to realize a few things here. Regan is obviously not the girl she use to be. Why? Because of a boy from ...

So true at the point which I am at in my life. To fly in the sky would not only be freedom, but it would be power. You would be ...

I am very interested in your story, however, it is too hard to try and read with the way you have it formatted. When somebody speaks it should be on ...

There are several parts of this poem that I enjoyed. 1) I really love the first few lines. Basically, what I got from it, is the first steps of that ...

Well...I am not sure exactly what I just read but isn't that the beauty of music, and especially rap? You don't have to understand it always. I'm...I'm not sure what ...

I am interested in reading this, but will not until it is formatted in more of a suitable form. There are some errors with "?" which I don't think is ...

I love this. It reaches to me in a very personal way. I love how you made it seem like the girl is not good enough for the guy, but ...