nomadpenguin

Wow, this poem was beautiful. The imagery was amazing, the rhythm was great. I guess it just made an especially large impact on me because I am close friends with ...

I had no trouble at all discerning what this poem was about. Between the title, the description, and the content of the poem, it is clear that this poem is ...

It's a lovely little poem, but there are just a few things you could improve on. The first and second stanzas are great. The third and fourth stanzas seem a ...

It's a pretty nice poem; I especially enjoyed the last stanza. However, the first stanza confused me quite a bit. You say that you find the cold comforting, and then ...

First of all, I'd like to say that I really enjoyed a lot of the imagery. However, I found a few big holes in this otherwise wonderful piece. One line ...

Great poem! You had some really great imagery. Just a few suggestions: "My body hums in the anticipation" makes a more sense as "My body hums with the anticipation" I'm ...

There were some great lines in here like "I found my heart, and I found some tape". However, there are quite a few things you could improve on. First of ...

I really hate to criticize this poem because it's intention and concept are so good. The first half was astonishing, but the second half fell short of the high standards ...

I really like the imagery and concept of this poem. There are only a few things I'd like to address. I think you could combine the first two lines into ...

Wow, that was great. It was great how you made it seem like the speaker's life was flashing before her eyes. The way you work in the numbers is brilliant. ...

The images were not very well developed and connected, and the storyline is unclear. However, I don't think those were your main focuses. The star of this poem is the ...

Like noninjas said, this has potential, but it could do with some revision. First of all, I have to say that I really like the idea of the third line. ...

...I'm not sure if this is a mistake, or your actual poem. If it's a mistake, I'm sorry. If it's a poem, I have to say I really like it. ...

A very nice poem. I thought that the second verse was much better than the first. Just some little nitpicks: I think that "evidence for the divine" would work much ...

Not a bad poem, but the third stanza definitely needs revision. The use of archaic words was inconsistent with thte rest of the poem, and came out as being quite ...