mynameisTyler

This piece is absolutely brilliant. I'm giving this one a star. I really enjoyed how you turned such a simple personally reflective concept into this amazing piece of art. I ...

hmmm. This is ok. I see a lot of potential in your writing style. I agree with bailecielo, you have to check the rhythm, and you DEFINITELY have to work ...

in bold are the references and minor additions, strikethroughs are omissions, comments are italicized-underlined ~~~~~~ Every four days he would come home, smiling or frowning. I'd say "smiling, frown

I think that this poem was a little too direct. Too much was said, and little was left to be "experienced". Although of course this will generally be effective in ...

I'm really impressed by this. Congratulations! It's brilliant. To think he's a book character! You managed to depict love so exhilaratingly without going "twilight" on it. Hehe. It is very ...

I am really excited by this poem as this is generally among the kind of styles that I am particularly interested in. So lets begin. I put lines that I ...

You seem to be emulating the essence of Max Ehrman, and that's a good thing. On capitalizing the lines, consider what style you are using. Does your capitalization (or lack ...

you're getting a little to conscious about what you're writing and its starting to show on the poem, I recommend that you "chill" and gather your thoughts, then give it ...

I really like the images you used in the poem, they were very vivid and powerful, I think creating the universe is probably your best skill as a writer. I ...

Tact Masking an obvious truth, at least for those with thought. A statement meant to prove a point, or just a moment’s taunt. Sarcasm. Shaking certainties erratic, or simply feeding ...

Being a fan of more modern and post-modern forms of poetry, I'm generally not really particular about sticking to the meter of the poem. Despite this, however, I still believe ...

ok. This is a start. It is good that you actually had an idea of what you wanted to write. Now what you have to do is to learn how ...

This is a very interesting concept for the poem. I'd just like to point out that at times, the similarities between the intimate relationship, and the business relationship that you ...

This is rather interesting. I like the universe you created and the scene that you were depicting. It is very dark, and intense yet more real than a tim burton ...

Wow. This is a really interesting poem. It is short and simple, and incredibly entertaining. You've certainly nailed how to stimulate a intellectual humor. I am amazed by the depth ...