Impossible You,
Impeccable you;
Dare I hope you exist?
Vain, Vain-- but I wish!
Oh, the dreams of your face,
The features I trace;
Chiseled lips I must kiss,
If only! I wish.
Surreal is thine eyes,
Devoid of all lies;
A sincere, steady gaze:
Oh heart, how you race!
Impossible You,
Unreal, dreamy you;
Man made of ink:
I love thee, I think.
But Impossible You,
Inanimate you--
Heart and world shook,
You're a man from a book.
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wooo Darcy! <3
well I loved this, it has a very different style to what i'm used to, but it's really beautiful. I have no nitpicks. Well done!
Truth is I didn't have Mr. Darcy in mind when I wrote this. Quite a feat since I think of him incessantly. The man from a book line came out of the blue.
BF: haha. Yes, still waiting for my doctor. Perhaps he lurks in the sciences department of our future alma mater.
Fitzwilliam Darcy: I thought poetry was the food of love.
Clearly made for Darcy!
If he reads this, there's no doubt he's going to fall head over heels for you!
haha!
*blush* LOL!
LOL!
This piece really moved me! Made me think of Mr. Knightley and my Comte de la Fere!
Let's just keep hoping we meet our own gentlemen LOVE... still in want of a doctor?
Maraming salamat Kat and Tyler. Me dear kababayans.
and thank you Loveless.
Haha... Twilight eh? I'm not an Edward Cullen fanatic though and shocking shall be the day I write poetry for him. I'm more of a Jane Austen hero fangirl. haha.
--Knightly
I'm really impressed by this. Congratulations! It's brilliant. To think he's a book character! You managed to depict love so exhilaratingly without going "twilight" on it. Hehe.
It is very engaging and intellectually stimulating.
Masterfully done.
-Tyler
Wow... I must say.
Or else I shall bite you in your sleep. Rawr. xD
I'm speechless. No nitpicks whatsoever! I love this! *Gold Star*
Keep it up!
Hi! Miss Summer Night at your service!
Well first of all I think this is a very nice poem; you are very talented.
I don't really see anything wrong with this. I think it is very beautiful
Impossible You,
Impeccable you;
Dare I hope you exist?
Vain, Vain-- but I wish!
Oh, the dreams of your face,
The features I trace;
Chiseled lips I must kiss,
If only! I wish. - Now my problem with this line is I don't get what exactly you are saying. Are you saying "I wish" as in you are wishing for a person like this, or are you saying " I wish" as in that would never be possible? It is very confusing to me please pm me about that because, i don't know, maybe the meaning should have been obvious-
Surreal is thine eyes,
Devoid of all lies;
A sincere, steady gaze:
Oh heart, how you race!
Impossible You,
Unreal, dreamy you;
Man made of ink:
I love thee, I think.
But Impossible You,
Inanimate you--
Heart and world shook,
You're a man from a book.
Well thats all, the rest was amazing! Bye!!