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Re: Sever | Prologue: To Die For
Hey there Jessegrey, welcome to YWS! Myjaspercat here to leave you a review Nit-Picks The four of them were a collective of panic [I would add a comma here] while ...
Jul 25, 2017 -
Re: The Red Light
Hey there Silverlady99, Myjaspercat here to leave you a review Line-by-Line/Nit-Picks The red light defines the stop sign [comma] in the night of life. I like this but the wording ...
Jul 25, 2017 -
Re: Goodbye
Hey there ElvenJedi, Myjaspercat here to leave you a review. Line-by-Line/Nit-Picks We'd cried already, that was over with. So I understand the use of contractions, however for this line it ...
Jul 25, 2017 -
Re: stand still at the edge of the world
Hey there thefreakfantastic, welcome to YWS! Myjaspercat here to leave you a review Nit-Picks Weak will; bending backward, I would add an 's' at the end of backward, Halting the ...
Jul 23, 2017 -
Re: A Goddesses Kiss
Hey there williamk16, welcome to YWS! Myjaspercat here to leave you a review. Line-by-Line/Nit-Picks As the words were spoken I was hooked, I would change 'was' to 'became' Every word ...
Jul 22, 2017 -
Re: LIFE-full song
Hey there bvbAngel, Myjaspercat here again to write you another review you've got to stand to fight you've got to fail to succeed [place a period here] you've got to ...
Jul 22, 2017 -
Re: for so long
Hey there Button, Myjaspercat here to leave you a review. Nit-Picks I am made of love, am supposed to breathe, exude, spread, drown in it like I would replace the ...
Jul 22, 2017 -
Re: The gaping maw is full of opportunity
Hey there Agnoeus, Myjaspercat here to leave you a review. I'm pretty sure I haven't reviewed a piece of yours yet so, welcome to YWS! Line-by-Line/Nit-Picks The ship drifts through ...
Jul 22, 2017 -
Re: Broken Girl
Hey there laurahoeffner, Myjaspercat here to leave you a review I don't think I've reviewed a piece of yours before, since you're pretty new so welcome to YWS! Line-by-Line/Nit-Picks You ...
Jul 21, 2017 -
Re: Breaking
Hey there ElvenJedi, Myjaspercat here to leave you a review Line-by-Line/Nit-Picks My heart isn't broken, though most would say it is. I'm not one to exaggerate, but I think it ...
Jul 21, 2017 -
Re: my personal hell
Hey there bvbAngel, welcome to YWS! Myjaspercat here to leave you a review Line-by-Line/Nit-Picks I'm running, I'm crying, I'm lost and confused. I don't
Jul 21, 2017 -
Re: If I could
Hey there, Myjaspercat here to leave ya'll a review For the most part I really liked this piece. Grammatically I didn't see anything wrong with it so that's a plus. ...
Jul 20, 2017 -
Re: And Then You Became the Moon
Hey there therichalder, Myjaspercat her to leave you a review Line-by-Line/Nit-Picks For your Reference: Overall Comments Spelling/Grammar Punctuation/Formatting Your gaze… [remove ellipsis] left me
Jul 20, 2017 -
Re: The world will move on
Hey there DarshayataDeka, welcome to YWS! Myjaspercat here to leave you a review Line-by-Line/Nit-Picks As the sun went down the dusty horizon And the last plane zoomed 'cross the sky, ...
Jul 20, 2017 -
Re: His life
Hey there AvaFaye, welcome to YWS! Myjaspercat here to leave you a review Line-by-Line/Nit-picks For your reference: Grammar/Spelling General Comments Punctuation/Formatting I still remember her as sh
Jul 20, 2017