monsterwriter

Perfect until perfection! You could've done better with the length of this poem. Remember one thing Length= Quality. That's what you want to get out to your readers, quality! My ...

What I would call almost perfect! 4 STARS! Very good! There were some mistakes but none that you can't notice on your own. Very Good once again, I am already ...

Amen!!

Jester, This was good. If you don't like harsh reviews, please do not read, I do not intend to offend you or your writing. Fist of all, your chapter was ...

I seriously think this is flawless! I have read this 5 times and can't find one mistake! Just check over the grammatical errors. Perfect! I think I am in love- ...

Okay, this was well done. 1. You might want to put the online conversation between Vriska and Aradia in Italics. AA: What do you mean? AG: I mean that your ...

Loved it! You score an A+ :D

Beautiful! This part was a little confusing: All I remember after that was a sudden wicked grin that glowed around a black night in front of a blazing home When ...

I will not point out your mistakes one by one, I will leave you to figure out what you did wrong. First of all, you capitalized unnecessary things. The story ...

Very Good! I noticed some "bits and pieces" that could be fixed! First Up! And then darkness. It was over Now what's wrong with that statement? Punctuation! A period (.) ...

This is great, next time you should watch how you capitalize your words. The poem was able to achieve one of the key principles in writing a poem, to catch ...

It was nice, I am of course looking forward to Chapter 2. The only part that I think you need to fix is the part where you said "lets see ...