You-(this is NOT a poem)

   I know you can't really see me but I'm still there

  I've got an eye on you

  don't know if you ever even set an eye on me once

  you've been there for forever

  but I only just realized it I must admit

  now when will you notice me?

  sorry, I am too embarrassed to talk to you

  too embarrased to write this

  I'll cross this out now...

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roxyask
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roxyask wrote a review · Wed May 30, 2012 8:13 pm

Hello Roxy here!
Some puntuation might help! A few commas here and there wouldnt do any harm!
I think you meant "write" instead of "right"
"sorry" should start with a capital letter
and one last thing- I think it would make more sense if you started the 3rd sentence with an "I"
Let me know if you've any Q's
--Roxy

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monsterwriter
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Loved it! You score an A+ :D



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