Published May 15, 2012
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Very Good! I noticed some "bits and pieces" that could be fixed!
First Up!
Now what's wrong with that statement? Punctuation! A period (.) in particular. A period tells your reader to stop or halt, if there is no full stop then it tells the reader that your poem will go on and on, obviously it didn't.
Other Punctuation Errors:
Should be:
There are more, but I am too tired to put them.
There are no other things that I think I should point out, you can discover your mistakes on your own.
Thank you monsterwriter
click on edit and edit it!