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Re: Girlfriends, Boyfriends, and Younger Brothers
Hahaha This story made me laugh! This is basically what any younger sibling would do. I did it to my older sister when she got her first boyfriend. No, I ...
Feb 25, 2015 -
Re: Tales of Aleron: lone against the world
There is a really good story here! Unfortunately, you need way more detail and background information. It was really hard for me to understand what was happening, especially in the ...
Jan 27, 2015 -
Re: Once Upon a Disorder
This is very great! I liked how you put so much detail into what she was feeling when the witch cursed her. I have anxiety and it really is terrible ...
Jan 27, 2015 -
Re: Music
Very incredible! This poem pretty much sums up on how music affects me. You could add more to it if you wanted, but then it might get to jumbled and ...
Jan 22, 2015 -
Re: In a World of Taupe
*stands up and claps* Bravo! Bravo! This is absolutely beautiful! The detail in this makes me think of an amazing and gorgeous boy - almost a god! And that is ...
Jan 20, 2015 -
Re: Goodbye
I'm torn! I really want to know what the speaker is a monster and what happened on thier last day together! However, I don't think they should be added because ...
Jan 20, 2015 -
Re: Chapter 3: An Unexpected Suprise
Sorry it took so long for me to read this! I just got back where the internet still exists /.\ I really like how this story is coming along! I ...
Jan 16, 2015 -
Re: I'm in love with poison
This is gorgeous! I love it! I don't know if this is a real story but if it is - Yay for you for letting him go! The pain will ...
Dec 11, 2014 -
Re: Chapter 2: The Escape
Hey! Thanks for telling me about this! I am really intrigued now! I really hate how the chapters are so small D: haha There was still capitalization errors: Mikey's name ...
Dec 11, 2014 -
Re: Just For A Second
This story was very moving. I loved every bit of it. It got the overall attitude of a suicidal person being brought back to life. If someone wants to die ...
Dec 9, 2014 -
Re: Wet in the Rain
First off, LOVED IT! It was eerie - which I love. The ending was predictable, but that didn't make me stop reading it! Secondly, this line, "living in a small ...
Dec 5, 2014 -
Re: Within the Fog
Whoa, did not see the ending coming... I really liked how you got two different perspectives! However,the part "Anyone else would be if" sounded weird to me. Maybe "Anyone would ...
Dec 3, 2014 -
Re: Gravy of Death
What the frick did I just read? This was the oddest thing I have read, but also the best! If there was something to say critically is: What is Potatodom? ...
Dec 3, 2014 -
Re: Chapter 1: The Awakening
Very nice and suspenseful! There were so capilization errors (i.e. dean, mikey, chrissy, and Deny), but a quick reread of would fix those problems. The dialogue that is happening in ...
Dec 3, 2014
