lovelysayshi

The only thing I noticed as something to fix, is that you spelled height wrong. Probably just a mishap because everything else was perfect and this poem is really beautiful. ...

Hello, love! I am going to try my best to help you better your writing, not that I'm an expert or anything. I can only try. So the first thing ...

Hello, love. I am going to suggest a few things that will further help you with your writing. :) First things first, (I'm the realest) the beginning is kind of ...

I really enjoyed this piece, and the rhyme scheme as well. People tend to force rhymes, but that wasn't the case at all in this poem. There were a few ...

Hello there! I'm going to try to do a simple review here, I've read some of your work before and it is quite intriguing. I'm excited about your future works. ...

The first thing I noticed immediately was how you said smile instead of smiles in the second line. Kinda just stood out to me, you probably already realized that though, ...

I know there is beauty in simplicity, but I feel as if this is too simple. I feel like you could have gone back and added more details to spice ...

Hello there! :) This was rather lovely, but a few tweaks could be made. -First of all, make sure that all of your lines begin with a capital letter -when ...

"I know will meet again." should be "I know we will meet again." "My tears will dry, No more ill cry, But it hurts so bad just to say good-bye." ...

"Still I am, unchanged," Here it should either be: Still, I am unchanged -or- Still I am unchanged, depends on the way you are meaning to say it. "I think ...

Hello There! Okay, so in this line: "Telling to Wait for 1 more day." Make sure that the "1" is actually the word "one". "But something is pricking from her ...

Hello there! So the first thing I would like to bring to your attention is your lack of capitalization. Always remember to capitalize the first letter of the first word ...

This poem starts out really strong, I love the emotion that you put into it. Okay, so the fourth line "Absorbed by earth, a shattered queen." The first three lines ...

Hmm. The beginning is a little confusing, maybe you could have elaborated more on what she was doing. I like how you worded the first stanza though. The second stanza ...

In your second paragraph However needs to be capitalized, and a comma needs to go after it because it is a conjunction. When you explained in two sentences how you ...