Tears

This poem starts out really strong, I love the emotion that you put into it.

Okay, so the fourth line "Absorbed by earth, a shattered queen." The first three lines flow along perfectly but this line is a bit confusing, I didn't quite understand the meaning of this line.

"Physical sorrow, tangible grief." Ahhh! This line is fantastic! I love it, good job.

"Falling to ground like windblown leaf," it would have made more sense to say 'Falling to the ground like a windblown leaf." It's still a good line though.

Another line that got me confused was this one: "Pain and torment, a soul in two," it doesn't quite make sense, I can tell there is a deeper meaning behind it though. Maybe you could try re-writing this line and elaborating on the meaning a bit more.

This poem was beautiful, but really I am not sure what the meaning of it is. There are some confusing parts that could be fixed up. Overall it was fantastic. Keep writing.
Toodles.

Oh, this was so pretty!
First off, your title was perfect, something so simple really adds to the beauty of this piece.
you made sadness seem so beautiful.
I think your rhyming held you back however. I could hear your message loud and clear every other line, and I think you just wanted to make it rhyme so you stuck in things you wouldn't have before. Don't let yourself become the slave of rhyme.
Your word choice, however,was outstanding. You really know what you're talking about here.
My favorite part was:

"Of what one might feel, on skin or in mind,
Reflecting the soul in the way of its kind.
A diamond teardrop, burning and soft,
Falling forever; but seconds aloft.
A gleaming teardrop; pure, it wipes clean,
Marring eternal, yet for moments is seen."

Because it gets down to the purity of what your poem really is in essence. That tears can have multiple meaning, and in that one tear, an entire life's story can reside, or the soul. I'd just fix your rhyming and This is practically perfect!
Keep Writing!

-Fortis Fortitude

Hey there, Mossyra,

I really liked this poem. You used rhyming really well and there was a nice rhythm to it. I liked tge very detailed and vivid description of a teardrop. You chose words that painted beautiful pictures in my mind and I admire your work for that. I agree with GeeLyria that you should organise it into stanzas. And in some places I would've liked to see a comma to help with the rhythm. If you read the poem aloud to yourself, I'm sure you'll know where.

"Falling to ground like windblown leaf." I think you forgot the 'a' in that sentance.
"Utterly silent yet clear as bell tolling." I like this line, and I think putting as clear as a bell tolling ruins the steady rhythm. I suggest you make bell bells, so the syllables are the same, but the line still makes sense.

My favourite lines were the last four. It was a brilliant way to conclude the poem.

Deanie x

I really like this, it's really good. Well done

Hi there, Mossyra.

It's an honor to read your poetry, because I find it lovely. I am here to drop you a quick review. Basically, all I want to suggest is for you to create stanzas. Even though, your poetry is neatly organized and uniform, I think stanzas would help too. I think this would look lovely-er if it was divided in quatrains; it would keep the readers from being lazy and confused. Also, love your rhymes!

~GeeLyria