Crave

First things first, I absolutely love how you put up a picture of a shattered heart. That went perfectly with the poem. This poem is truly amazing and it makes me envy you in every way. I, myself, cannot write poems worth anything. So I just want to say this was very well written. Loved the part when you said that you were the cat. Also, I want to say that you had a few good points, for example, when you said

Another quote goes:

"Ignorance is Bliss"

But no my dear friends, that was not the case.

Loved that part.
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One thing that didn't really flow was when you said.

that I sat around waiting for just Mr. Right.

The 'just' kind of threw it off a little.
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Other than that I give you a thumbs up.

musicandme

First off this was amazing. The picture and format itself was great. I felt like the picture you chose fit in well with the dead love theme. And the format, how you had the "~"(don't know what they're called) after every stanza made the stanza feel complete.

Although one thing with the poem that I'm going to nitpick was the fact that some of the stanzas had lines that rhymed and about half way you stopped rhyming. But even though you did that I thought the poem still sounded good.

You did a great job with spelling and gramar.

This was really good, keep it up!

You did an awesomely great job on this. But before I go to the greatness of the technical things that you did, I would like to express my admiration to your work's heart.

The work itself speaks about love in its deepest hurts. I almost felt what you have felt. It is indeed very amazing. The wonder that you showed at the beginning when you were waiting for "just Mr. Right". A lot of ladies do wait for that man to come.

The brokenness that you expressed really burned my heart. How can something so cruel happen to someone who is just waiting honestly and patiently to that very loving someone. The ways of God with everything is just hidden from us. Sometimes it makes us wander, other times it makes us wonder. But all in all, God's ways are still higher than ours.

I would just like to tell you also that you sounded like one of the classic writers of all times. Like Shakespeare and Poe.

I just loved this poem. The emotions, the style, the choice of words. They are perfect.

Keep writing.

I really enjoyed this piece, and the rhyme scheme as well. People tend to force rhymes, but that wasn't the case at all in this poem. There were a few things that kind of bothered me though.

"I sat around waiting for just Mr. Right"
I would take out 'just' and see how that sounds. It flows better.

"I had no longer found for what I have longed"
I'm a little confused about this line. I am assuming there is supposed to be a deeper meaning of some sort behind it, but maybe next time you could clarify things a little bit more.

"Only did I succeed to seek up more damage"
This line is kind of wordy, and even a little awkward. Maybe you could re-word it to match the lines that it follows.

"I was wrong to search the pieces, the pieces that were already mine"
I am going out on a wing here to say that the pieces are referring to the boy...so I am kind of confused as to how the pieces were already yours.

Besides the few mistakes I did see, it was a great poem and the ending was really beautiful. Endings are always the most important part to me.

Musicandme,

The title fits perfectly. I love it. Because the word 'crave' is generally associated when you convince yourself that you need something although it's bad, like love that was never meant to be. So super great job, I always thought a title is one of the things that defines a poem good or bad.

Right away, you can recognize how you chose to rhyme your lines. I always kind of respect a rhyming poem, cause it's traditional. I guess I just had a pet peeve with a few of your word choices:

"He stole my heart over a matter of time,

it was far more than an unwanted[I would get rid of 'unwanted' because it adds too many syllables to the line, then just change 'an' to 'a'.], deadly crime.

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If you've heard the term[switch 'term' to 'phrase' because a term is usually one word, where this is a quote, but not stated full -"and satisfaction brought him back" is the rest- so yeah, I would say 'phrase'.]:

"Curiosity killed the cat"

Then I my friends, was the cat. [because this doesn't rhyme, it sounds so out of place. I've been trying to think of something that rhymed better, but I came across probably the same problem that you had. So, maybe just try saying "Then that was me, alone in the gray? or alone and gray. It's a hard technique, rhyming. If you decide not to change this, then you need to add a comma after 'I' because there is a pause in the speech.]

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As I dug deeper into this person's mind,[definitely strongly recommend not saying "this person's mind" because he is suppose to be special to you, I mean, he stole your heart. I would say "...into his mind". Sounds a lot smoother.]

I found things out that no one should find."

Everything else, I thought was fine and dandy! I do like your very last line, sounds really good, cause it shows, that you learned from your mistake.

So, be sure not to take any of this harshly, even if I accidentally did at some point sound harsh, know that it was accidental, I'm just trying to tell you my opinion, since it is a review. Great job overall, I think just change a couple of things and you're all set to go!

Keep expressing.

-Percybeth

Hey,

This is a inspiring poem. I can't find any punctuation errors so yay you! I feel the need to inform you however that not every line needs to start with capitalization, just throwing that out there. Also, despite this being a beautiful poem I feel like the vocabulary you used is kinda limited and repetitive. My last little nitpick here is the rhyme scheme. There are parts of the poem that rhyme beautifully, but then there are parts that leave me kinda confused.
The old love was gone,

I had no longer found just Mr. Right.

Like this, I'm sorry maybe its just me but it doesn't seem quite right. All in all however beautiful poem. I hope to read more of your work in the future.
Sincerely,
Collideascope