lolosboing

I like how you describe the feeling of thinking of ideas. This is something that a lot of writers can really relate to—I think you're describing what it's like to ...

Hi! I LOVED it!! The images that the words put into my head were so beautiful and were like inspiration itself! The intro to the poem was breathtaking "I try ...

Hi your poem sounds really interesting and the details and the sort of story/plot feel it had was quite relatable if I'm thinking what you're thinking :p "Sometimes I'm on ...

hi I'm not exactly sure what your poem is about, but I really enjoyed the imagery and details you put into it. Like "unsheath'd pearls shine at humo'r" and "Alas, ...

Hi! I'll just give a few small suggestions: "Promising this forever" Promising what forever? "Your wearing that worn coat" You're wearing that worn coat "You’ve had it for years And ...

Hi. I like your idea of sort of lyrics and a song! I think it's really interesting. I do agree with CocoaCat about putting it in the lyrics category. :p ...

Hi. Your poem was really nicely structured i think. it had a nice flow to it and a bit of a plot or story. I'm kind of not sure what ...

Hi. I liked your poem because of the detail you put into it. The emotion is also really clear and in some ways easy to relate to. The one word ...

Hi. I like your poem. It has emotions and some character despite it's length. I can't say much because it's a haiku and is short, but I like the last ...

hi. I think it would be easier to read if you broke it up into stanzas (unless you meant it to be that way) I really enjoy how it makes ...

Hi! First of all, I can see there is a lot of force in this poem! Yes, yes, seeing all the cuss words! But anyways, I'm kind of confused. Did ...

Hi! Here's a few things that I thought could be changed to make the story better. Firstly, I'm pretty sure in this part: "and there were so many others that ...

Hi! Lolosboing again! Okay, I'll just ask some questions! Why the heck are they being chased by little red riding hood with glowing eyes and claws? Why is Shane being ...

Hi! I love this portfolio!!! So funny!!! I like the creepy humor you have in all these works. There's something I'm a bit confused with though. Why are they hairy ...

Hi! Uh...first of all...what the heck!!! That is one...horrifying story! I'm messed up, so I kinda like how dark it was, but i'm just a tad bit confused. Is the ...