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Hello Niveda! hannah here for a review, as requested. Hope it is helpful! Grows: "When a little girl did dart Into the kitchen." You don't need to capitalize the beginning ...

Hello Niveda! Hannah here for a quick review. Hope it is helpful! Grows: "'school-mama', as class-teachers..." You do not need a comma after that. "'Although I can' guarantee that...'" You ...

Hi! A belated welcome to YWS. @hannah0528 here for a quick review. I don't really see the point in pointing out grammatical mistakes cause this isn't a literary work and ...

Hello Ichthys! @hannah0528 here for a review. Nice to see you active! Hope it is helpful. Grows: none! this was really really great. Glows: Oh wow! You have created a ...

Hello Ilium417! @hannah0528 here for a review. It has been a long time, so I might be a little shaky. Grows: I feel as though this short story was a ...

Hi MapleWay! starlitmind! @hannah0528 here for a quick review. I have never written, read or reviewed a collab poem, so this will be interesting! It has been forever since I've ...

Hello LilPWilly! @hannah0528 here for a review. Hope it is helpful! Grows: "Weelll..." Maybe you could do it like "Welllll...." because that is how I normally see it. Sorry if ...

Hello Smudge! Welcome to the site. Hannah here for a quick review. Hope it helps! (Also, congratulations on getting your first work into the spotlight! You are going to be ...

Hello Alice! Hannah here for a quick review: Grows: I think that you switched tenses from the first chapter and throughout this book. You have to decide between present tense ...

Hello! Hannah here for a quick review. I'm so excited, this was so good! You have much potential as a writer. Glows: Oh my gosh, this was amazing! Descriptive, detailed, ...

Hello illy7896! Hannah here for a quick review. Hope it's helpful! Grows: "'Hiya there!' It started cheerily." "It" shouldn't be capitalized. And I have a question: is "It" it's name? ...

Hello Andrew! Hannah here for a quick review. Grows: I think maybe you should have separated it out into stanzas to express that "Roller coaster" effect. Also, the H's are ...

Hi Shadow! Hannah here for a quick review. I don't really know how too, but I will try my best! Grows: Not really any improvements, this was so cool! Glows: ...

Hello! Hannah here for a quick review on this interesting piece. First of all, I agree with all of the good things and bad things that you put! YWS is ...

Hello Alice! Hannah here for a quick review. Grows: When Opa was telling the story, it was not only quoted but italicized. You don't need to both, you can quote ...