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What love feels like

by MaybeAndrew


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hello. i am here again to review your work after your another work- how to take notes like a god. so,here, I am gonna use your technique to show you how your work was.

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it was an enjoyable read. please do continue with your work.




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Hello Andrew! Hannah here for a quick review.

Grows:
I think maybe you should have separated it out into stanzas to express that "Roller coaster" effect. Also, the H's are normally at the end rather than in the middle scattered everywhere.
Glows:
LOL this is hilarious and true and it makes me want to scream! WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW




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Carlito says...



A perfect encapsulation.
Beautifully constructed and executed.




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LilPWilly says...



Hey it’s me again.
And it’s you again, leading me on with the title.
Only critique, for some reason, on mobile, I can’t read your full work. And I’m dying to get to the end. On the other hand there's something poetic about how it trails off the edge of the screen into infinity. Excellent work as always gg




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What a fantastic work. I love to the use of A. It really brings the feeling and emotion to life. Please do continue with your works :))




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Its a poetic genius. Absolutely loved the poem.




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this poem is the best i've ever read. it is so thoughtful and provacative. LOL!




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beauty is a weak word... it is... art



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Oh wow its just the greatest poem ever created
LOL
A+ plus for this work lol
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MaybeAndrew says...


I'm glad you see it's wisdom



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A plus.




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Thank you



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Heylo Andrew! (maybe). This is a review of your emotional poem, "What love feels like"

First of all, I loved the straight A's you gave the poem. It really is what love feels like. Just in perfect harmony yet very intriguing. Really scary, yet fun... yet scary.

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My favourite from the poem has to be:

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It gives such a thrill to love, it has such a deep connection with your title in the poem. I admire the creativity and simplicity of the poem that it gave me chills as I read it in my head. T~T I love this.

Love lots~~!! <3




MaybeAndrew says...


Thanks a ton for the review! I like that you notice the insane laughing bit. Also, a belated welcome to YWS! Your review looked like it had been written by a real veteran.





Thank you!! I'm learning a lot even if i was here for just a little while XD :3~~



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Em16 says...



Exactly.




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I'm glad you get it.



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Hi there MaybeAndrew! I'm here for a review on this riveting, deeply thought-provoking poem of yours.

I think this poem concisely conveys the intense emotions that accompany love. Your use of all-caps, along with your choice to not use any punctuation, work together to portray the extremity of the narrator's feelings. I also enjoyed the fact that you employed not only the letter "A", a very harsh vowel, but also the letter "H", a much softer consonant. The contrast between these two sounds keeps the poem from becoming too harsh or repetitive.

I'm not sure if this was intentional, but in some sections of the poem it almost sounds as though the narrator is laughing? For example, towards the middle of the poem:

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This part, which could potentially be interpreted as a joyful (or conversely, hysterical) laugh, adds another layer of meaning to the poem. Now the reader wonders if the narrator is screaming out of the agony of heartbreak, or the joy of falling in love? This also allows the reader to interpret the poem in a way that they can relate to, which is a lovely touch!

One thing I would like to suggest is that you consider utilizing line breaks, to further the effect of the poem. One possible way you could divide up the line would be:
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AAAAA
HHAAAAAAAAHHHHAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA
AAAAA
HHAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH
HHHHH
Here, you alternate between very long lines and very short lines (for example, "AAAAA" is five letters long). I think this would accurately depict the fact that the narrator has to pause for breath a couple of times through their scream, and also add some visual texture to the poem.

Overall, this was a very unique and engaging poem. Because of the fact that it can be interpreted in two different ways, it is relatable for a very wide audience, and I think your use of stylistic choices (such as capitalization and punctuation) further add to the impact and effect of the poem. I hope this review proves useful, and if you have any questions, feel free to ask!

Keep writing,

whatcha

omg I had so much fun writing this review you don't even know xD




Yoshikrab says...


GASP YOU WROTE A LONGER REVIEW THAN ME



MaybeAndrew says...


hey watcha! Thanks for diving into my very well thought out poem. I like that you noticed the laughing, so it can be taken as a scream of joy. I think you might be right with those line breaks! I might try that!
XD, I'm glad you enjoyed reviewing this piece.





not to be a bug or anything but this review is gold



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It is better than the work itself



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Hi Andrew! I'm here to review your work called "What love feels like". Great work! Your sentence structure, grammatical use, word choice, and technical paragraph structure are all excellent!

OKAY THIS HAS GOT TO BE THE BEST LITERARY WORK EVER POSTED

(there. that's my review)

Anyways, don't we all feel that way? Love is basically the pain generator no matter how sugar-coated it is. We all experiences issues romantically at some point in life and it's hard to contain a scream. Even though you seem to have intended this to be a humorous work, I feel it has a deeper intent to it. Joke-wise, you did an excellent job. Serious-wise, it gives the reader something to think about.

Anyways, I hope you were satisfied with this review! (I mean, how did I even write such a long review on such a short work?)

-yoshi




MaybeAndrew says...


Thank you for the review! Yes, I've always felt love was a front for a ton of other emotions. Good and bad.




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