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Hmmm, interesting poem. I reaaally loved the beginning, and how you likened determination to a furnace. And this poem seems like it was written exactly as you saw it in ...

First of all, I agree with ConverseFireGirl on two things: 1. That poem was amazing! 2. That poem could have used a couple touch-ups in the grammar department, because the ...

Oooo, very original. I never considered writing a poem like this. And I like it! It reminds me a bit of Katniss in the Hunger Games, but maybe that's just ...

Hullo! I really enjoyed the prologue, and could easily see it leading into a high-quality story (or novel, or wherever you decide to take this!). The technicalities are great, the ...

Hmmm, sounds familiar. I really like that this poem seems to describe those moments of self-doubt that everyone experiences sometime in their life, whether you intended that or not. The ...

Just a few thoughts on this poem: Really enjoyed it, which came as a surprise to me after reading the extremely misleading title. The scene feels so real, which is ...

Intriguing... First off (before I forget): 1. continant=continent 2. "Finn." Emilia lectured. "You have to focus. = "Finn," Emilia lectured,"You have to focus. 3. "Follow me then," = "Follow me ...

I hear what you're saying. Your emotions and voice are strong throughout the poem; even if the poem had no flow, I would like it simply because passion built up ...

Greetings. And welcome. *glances down at previous review* *sighs* As usual, I'll cut a strait to the case, loop around, have a picnic, and arrive at my point. I am ...

Helloo. I'm not quite sure what this poem means, but it certainly feels depressing (in a good way. I think.). If that's what you were aiming for, congrats! I can ...

The fluidity is... refreshing. "when emotion is piled into restless harmonies that swirl into aimless patterns of noise" My favorite lines by far, I can feel blending of harmonic music, ...

Heeeey... Mad Pseudo-god. I'll cut strait to the case. I was browsing through a few random poems, and this one caught my eye. The imagery is beautiful throughout the piece, ...