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I get the feeling that this poem is written about tampering done to the soil/earth. If so, let it be known that I really liked the idea.
Heya, ChynaRyder! Let's get cracking, shall we?
OK, so I liked the tone of the poem, and how you presented the idea that gardens are meant to be paradise to life, where life has flourished and where it is beautified, but gardens are also home to death and decay. It was a good take on the pessimist's view of dead gardens, and I could just feel the hopelessness seeping out of those last two lines! Good use of garden-ish imagery, too!
However, how I perceived this poem may be quite different from what you meant to convey to us, I think, because it's pretty unclear in several places, and there are some places where your poem feels fragmented. Like over here:
You have a period between "dismal" and "leaving." That just breaks the flow of the poem, and the two lines just don't... connect. Maybe if you removed the period you'd see what I mean? Also, it's pretty confusing when you talk about "garnishing" the ground. Maybe add a little bit to it and clarify what you mean? I like how you talk about the dirt as "dismal," but you need to develop a flow. You use simple and yet striking imagery, but your poem lacks life. You could have started out on a lank note, then spoken valiantly, talking about the garden as if it is a depressing reality that cannot be altered, and then ended on a quiet note again. I personally loved the way you began and ended the poem, but you kinda lost me in the middle. Look over it, re-read it and I'm sure you'll turn this beauty of a poem into something even more exceptional!
So keep writing! I hope this review helped!
Cheers,
~Pompadour
To be honest with you, this is an interesting poem. I like the content and everything, but I am trying to figure out the main purpose of the poem.
I don't understand what this means honestly...
This is actually a really good poem. Maybe if I think hard enough, I'll know what the purpose is xD
Anyways, keep up the good work! c:
-K
Helloo.
I'm not quite sure what this poem means, but it certainly feels depressing (in a good way. I think.). If that's what you were aiming for, congrats! I can see why it made your teacher cry.
I personally am not a huge fan of the poem itself, but I do appreciate its simplicity. In this case, less is more.
I hope you find this review helpful!
This is a great poem but I'm not entirely sure what it is about. That might just be because I am awful at understanding poetry meanings. Also, in poems the letter of first line should be a capital.
I'm not quite sure what this poem is about. I think you should add in some more punctuation, commas would be helpful. If you won't do this, at least capitalize the first letter in each line. I know these are technical issues, but the fixed nitpicks will really make it flow a lot smoother.
I loved the imagery in this poem. I can tell the "garden" aspect of this poem is a metaphor. For what, though, I'm not quite sure. The lines:
I'm not sure if these lines mean to make a decision to grow again as a person, or to make a bad decision twice. Again, I really don't know. I think I'm fine with not knowing. A part of me likes how I can interpret this poem in any way I wish. In a way, it makes the poem so much more personal yet mysterious at the same time. On another note, however, I kinda wish I knew what this poem is about. YOU HAVE CONFUZZLED ME!
Great poem, keep writing