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  • Poetry » Satire, Culture Re: White Privilege: Pigmented Protection

    satire. i wasn't a fan of this for a few reasons, the biggest one being that you ditched all elements of an actual poem to beat your message across the ...

    Oct 24, 2016
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Romantic Re: Time and Wait

    wasnt keen on this. hi. the thing i didnt like the most on this was the format you had. without punctuation it becomes incredibly flustered and confusing to read. in ...

    Jun 8, 2016
  • Poetry » Horror, Realistic Re: Rat Race

    i personally wasnt the fan of this. i understand that you were aiming for something deep and poetic that resembles fear but the delivery tainted that. you use long sentences ...

    May 10, 2016
  • Poetry » General, General Re: A Barrel

    i am openly underwhelmed. this is a simple poem and that's not a good thing. you cover a topic that's a dead horse, you're beating it with a baseball bat. ...

    Apr 17, 2016
  • Poetry » Realistic, Realistic Re: Death of the dream

    this lacks variety. this covers a topic that has been beaten to death on this website. it becomes redundant and not fun to read. the last two lines in your ...

    Apr 17, 2016
  • Poetry » Satire, Humor Re: I Will Wait

    i honestly don't understand the point of this. i get that this is a parody, but it wasn't a solid one at all. it looks like your main approach of ...

    Apr 17, 2016
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Corruption

    hi. i wasn't a fan of this. you didn't bring anything new to corruption, and, well, it came off as silly. you talk about corruption and you use big words ...

    Mar 19, 2016
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Never Hers

    i don't get this. this brought no emotional catharsis to me. this is generic and beaten to a bloody pulp. you talk about the girl who fake smiles, who has ...

    Mar 19, 2016
  • Poetry » Teen Fiction, Realistic Re: the girl who tries

    this is actually decent. even though you don't bring anything new or refreshing in the poem, you manage to step around all the obvious sayings and instead, bring something original ...

    Mar 19, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Action / Adventure Re: Chapter1:A Day in My Life

    this is tough to read. i struggled while reading this. this wasn't enjoyable. a key tip you need to keep in mind while writing is don't have multiple characters speak ...

    Feb 21, 2016
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: To Think I Used To Be Your Savior

    this is okay. this has some good and bad things. you use a lot of faux poetics that turns off the reader, and too many one liners to make it ...

    Feb 21, 2016
  • Poetry » General, Dramatic Re: I'm here too.

    i didn't like this. this made no grammatical sense at all. sure you portrayed the loneliness feeling but it made no sense. what you need to do is have it ...

    Feb 21, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Humor Re: Kinetic History years ago

    what is this hi, hikaru. i don't like this work at all. you just posted a 404'd link. how is this supposed to draw in readers? post something that works ...

    Feb 20, 2016
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Poems are Simple

    i wasn't a fan of this. hey rectangles, i didn't understand the purpose of this poem. there is no evident humor value within it, to be perfectly honest. "hey guys ...

    Dec 27, 2015
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Other Re: That...Father, Daughter, Relationship

    pain and poetry only goes well together thinking about it, not writing it. hey scar, i wasn't a fan of this poem. i found no real substance in this poem. ...

    Dec 27, 2015


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