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Wow. I don't know what to say. This totally describes how I got my girl friend. Ok In the third line you use the word fibrous. Love the word, but ...

I really don't get the path of what this poem follows is. In the beginning, I think you talking about sex. Not sure. I didn't get who the speaker was ...

Wow, I really understand what you're talking about because me and my girlfriend go to different school and we can't see each other a lot. I really love this poem. ...

I love this poem, however, I would suggest putting it in a poem format rather than the format you are in currently. I dunno if you want to keep it, ...

I really like this idea! The language is really good. And it totally fits the Shakespeare language. I think that in the 5th line I would say "Fear no for ...

I really like this poem. I think the different positions of the stanzas was a great idea. I love all of the stanzas really, but they are kinda cliche. Thats ...

Wow. That is a lot of profanity. I think that only using the F word does have some impact, but if you use other swear words or other phrases that ...

Wow! I love it! I must say that you loose your rhyme scheme after the fourth line. I would either junk the rhyming idea or figure out a way to ...

Wow! Um..Ok. That was not what I expected from your title. I don't really understand what you mean by the annual genocide. Do you mean to say that the leaves ...

This is an amazing poem! Oh! Hi there Aspiring here for a review. Just a question, why do you put a comma after every stanza. I would also write this ...

Hi! Just here for a review First off, I LOVE this! There are however a couple of things I could fix. First break this into multiple stanzas. It would help ...

Love this! It really makes me feel something. What gift are you talking about in the second stanza? In the last stanza, I am confused about what goes in like ...

Is the brother writing this poem? OH! Hi! Aspiring Here. I also wouldn't use the word ensued in the third stanza. It means to happen or occur after and because ...

This is really dark and some of the lines don't really make sense. In the line "I trod in dog faeces again" Is that supposed to be faces? The first ...

Aspiring here for a review! This is written like by prose piece. I don't know if that is a choice you made or by accident. I really like "and especially ...