antigone

but my wings were clipped by doubt-- who told me I could fall. Amazing. The whole poem is very, very good. Nice job.

Thanks for all the comments everyone. It means a lot. Especially people who explained about the semicolon :wink:. electricbluemonkey, if people have been at sea for long periods of time ...

Very quiet and pretty. 'Gorgeous' is a good word for this. I enjoyed it very much, especially With freshly grazed pink knees, torn hands and raw knuckles, we reach the ...

Heh. Now I get it. Thanks.

I really liked the middle stanza, where the whole nurture/nature cliche became un-cliched and cool. The last two lines were a little... abrupt? or something. Or maybe I'm just not ...

Ditto what bubblewrapped said about loving it while not fully understanding it. The last stanza was my favorite, although I'd write out 'could have' instead of 'could've'. Very nice work.

I have nothing useful to say, but I love this. That's all.

Modest, aren't we? :) But I liked 'and so the world changed.' too.

Thank you! I know snowflakes is usually one word, but I felt it fit better as two. Thanks for pointing it out though.

Soft and pretty. "Tired with the burden of haunting" is a great image. Or idea or whatever. Nice job. You say alot with so few words.

I like it. Especiallly the ending was brilliant. Like Doubt said, the questioning is very nice.

This poem won a contest and will be posted on the buses! Congradulations, RiverGirl! :elephant:

Lol. That's cool. And the title made me laugh. A little long maybe? I kind of lost the plot near the end. Anyway, that was sweet. :)

Cool! I hate wearing coats.

I like this. Alot. The rhythm is perfect and the one word lines that start the stanzas are really effective. The first stanza is my favorite. The last one seems ...