Published August 20, 2006
My floor is littered with the pages of things
left unsaid,
muffled voices that still call out
from empty closets
unceasingly wishing to be heard,
but I will not allow them--
though I should.
I walk amongst the fiery remains
of a world,
lost in its own reasoning.
Sparks swirl,
like angry hornets--
stinging nettles bite into my flesh
and the pain stays.
The prophets knew
what I long to say.
But as quickly as the tree falls,
Another grows to take its place.
Nothing kills as swiftly as a memory--
no blaze so great
that it can’t grow.
The heat radiates from
everything and nothing,
wherever the breath of life respires--
there it is.
Knowledge is a callous tyrant
and I am chained in his courts.
Withstanding the bite of a thousand lashes,
crisscrossing my back,
like the flight of
a solitary fly.
What good comes from language?
when you are surrounded by the deaf.
I would soar,
but my wings were clipped by doubt--
who told me I could fall.
There is no end to something
that had no beginning--
no foreseeable conclusion for a story,
that was never more than a rumor.
It ends pretty much the same,
as all in life--
an abrupt close,
just like this.
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Amazing.
The whole poem is very, very good. Nice job.
Thanks guys, I'm flattered.
No crits. Just praise. Awesome job!
Very elegant. It is very easy to read. The words just flow off my tougue. Great work!
that was very good. It feels full of anguish and pain. I think it was written well, and I don't have anything bad to say about it. It was a very good poem. ^_~
Hey this was really good; the flow of the poem was good.
My points of view:
I would suggest ends instead of end.
Well done, keep writing.