Yes, I think WL covered everything.
Ribbons in her hair and shrapnel in her face... powerful.
Well done, bent!
it seems this little girl
with ribbons in her hair and shrapnel in her face
are all part of God's plan
it's good to know that in the billions
of galaxies, strewn about the universe
He's rooting for one little country
on one little planet
to drop bombs on breakfast tables
Yes, I think WL covered everything.
Ribbons in her hair and shrapnel in her face... powerful.
Well done, bent!
I didn't want to comment on this, because I would have nothing to say. I frankly and simply enjoyed this.
Wow. This is so amazingly apt and... good. I love the stark image and the deadpan tone of this.
to drop bombs on breakfast tables
I'd change 'to drop' to 'that drops' because rooting for a country makes more sense than rooting for an action. I think.
Your title confuses me. 'Bleet'?
Other than that, I love it. We need more poems like this. Excellent work.
Very strong poem. But there was one line:
with ribbons in her hair and shrapnel in her face
are all part of God's plan
with ribbons in her hair and shrapnel in her face
it's good to know that in the billions
of galaxies, strewn about the universe
He's rooting for one little country
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