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Greetings! I like the minimal choice of words in this piece. It reminds me of some interesting formating styles in other types of poetry, like Japanese tankas and haikus. I ...

Greetings! I like morbidness of this piece with its intentional denaturing of the body, and I also like its simplicity of its lack of capitalization and punctuation. It is difficult ...

Hello and thanks for your poem! I believe this piece establishes an obstacle and a resolution very well; it is very clear in its method of delivery. The level of ...

Hello! Romantic poetry is very difficult to write well; I think you have written well enough in this particular piece. Thanks for sharing! I was very delighted that the structure ...

Salutations! On a less happier note, this poem is thick and dim. You have done a fare job in expressing the loss in this piece. The details are prevalent and ...

Greetings! Thanks for posting your piece; it takes a lot to share your personal writing. I really enjoyed it though. It reminded me of a particular genre that I always ...

Hello Monsters, Hands down this is one of the best poems I've read on the boards; it's almost intimidating. It's so refreshing that it makes me angry that I don't ...

Dear rhiasofia, Hello, and thanks for the read. You have some great expressions here; the imagery is quite fun. But somtimes the rhythm is contorted because you try to overload ...

Dear retrodisco666, I like the questions that this the poem highlights. The background story is told very well; however, in the foreground there are some green mistakes. I see spelling ...

Dear Ianhammond98, This was an excellent read; thank you very much. I like the form of the poem and the conclusion near the last few lines. You have chosen to ...

Dear DMan117tacos, I like this poem; it is feels a little too normal at first, but the nature of it develops after a bit. A second read reveals this. There ...

I would separate these two pieces from each other, for they are strong enough by themselves. Having them together might become a distraction. Also, the topics behind each poem don't ...

I like the structure of the first three stanzas; you used an interesting cookie-cutter for this poem. The issue that I have with these first stanzas is that I feel ...

For this poem, I think consistency would benefit it. Immortality, according to your poem, is rather unpleasant. There is a mathematical coldness to it; I would use the theme of ...

Wow. This is quite exceptional. You didn't even need to describe the fact that the errors were done on purpose; it's clear that the mistakes are permanent. And it's my ...