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Re: Home
Hey, there! Nice poem. I like the mental pictures you create with your wording. It shows a unique beauty. The whole thing gives an idea of a sort of tranquility, ...
Nov 8, 2019 -
Re: Hidden Heir Ch.1
Hey, there. You've got an interesting plot going on. It's always captivating when a writer introduces a sense of mystery and doesn't explain all the details right away. I like ...
Nov 6, 2019 -
Re: destroyer of love
Hey, there. Nice piece. You've done well illustrating the narrator's pain. The first paragraph is cool in that it mentions feeling, hearing, tasting, smelling - however, it seemed slightly incomplete ...
Nov 6, 2019 -
Re: Chapter 13: Her
Awesome writing, once again! This chapter really pulled me into the story. Wow. It's amazing. The way you show us the backstory and yet refrain from giving the whole explanation ...
Nov 4, 2019 -
Re: Grateful
Hey, there. This story makes a really good point that many of us could definitely afford to ponder. I'm glad you've taken on the task of illustrating that point. I ...
Nov 4, 2019 -
Re: .
Hi! I love first chapters. Glad to see this out. It seems to be the start of a cute and exciting story. Also, I like how you've put college in ...
Nov 4, 2019 -
Re: Least Romantic: Chapter Fourteen: Postschool
Hey, there! I'm glad to see this posted. I love the turn you've taken here. You left us feeling so hopeless with your cliffhanger ending where Ala turns down her ...
Nov 4, 2019 -
Re: Diet Coke
Hello! This is a cute poem, and reading it made me feel happy. It almost sounds like it could be a song. I really like the concept of it. Some ...
Nov 4, 2019 -
Re: Broken Promises
Hey, there! Beautiful writing. Your talent and creativity give this poem a nice feel. I really liked how you employed the repetition of: "All those broken promises, all those dirty ...
Nov 4, 2019 -
Re: A poem about writing
Hey, there! This was a fun poem to read. Nothing too serious exerts the reader's brain while taking in the beauty of this creative work, which is nice for a ...
Nov 4, 2019 -
Re: Love Cycles-A Palindrome
Beautiful! This palindrome shows an admirable talent. It takes a lot of concentrated, organized thinking, and not anyone could pull it off this well. Great job. This work talks about ...
Oct 31, 2019 -
Re: The beginning of something I haven't thought of a title for yet
Hey, fellow writer! You've started off on a cool work of writing. I am fascinated by it already. I like how you describe people, but you don't over-describe. One good ...
Oct 29, 2019 -
Re: the tally of times
Hey! Your work is well-written. It gives the reader something to ponder. I don't personally watch TV, but still, I am aware of how the stream of evil can hammer ...
Oct 29, 2019 -
Re: Facing Fall
Hello! This is a nice poem. I noticed you focused on each autumn month and listed specific characteristics. That gives it a nice structure and organization. It's also perfect for ...
Oct 29, 2019 -
Re: The Game Of Fame-Chapter 1
Hey! You've got a cool story started. Giving us this glimpse into the beginning of the main character's life is a fascinating way to start. Usually stories just drop us ...
Oct 29, 2019
