Young Writers Society

abachmann here!!

Wow this is really cool. I think what you did here is very smart. I think what your meaning here is how you feel that your story is alive and breathing. My favorite part of your story is the end, where you say

“Sit back, frown at the Screen like it’s a
Broken Thing
Because the Story
Is
Over”

I love that!!!

I have one tiny nitpick...
You added a lot of capital letters on the middle of sentences. Maybe this is intentional, maybe not!!
Other then that, I love this! It perfectly portrays being a author!! Amazing job!!

-abachmann

abachmann here!!

Wow this is really cool. I think what you did here is very smart. I think what your meaning here is how you feel that your story is alive and breathing. My favorite part of your story is the end, where you say

“Sit back, frown at the Screen like it’s a
Broken Thing
Because the Story
Is
Over”

I love that!!!

I have one tiny nitpick...
You added a lot of capital letters on the middle of sentences. Maybe this is intentional, maybe not!!
Other then that, I love this! It perfectly portrays being a author!! Amazing job!!

-abachmann

Hey, there! This was a fun poem to read. Nothing too serious exerts the reader's brain while taking in the beauty of this creative work, which is nice for a change. Now, I like serious poems myself, but this one is different - lighter and easier to grasp. It's a nice change.

I think it's cool how you've captured the joys and also some of the struggles of writing. You've shown the passion that the writer has as he/she puts their story into words. You also put in some personal touches that I really like, such as mentioning "Like the time I played the 12 string," and "Mouth dry and tea glass empty, an inconvenience to push through". It reflects your personality a little bit, but there's not so much of it in there that few others can relate, so it's a nice touch.

I think I have to agree with what's already been written on your use of the word "stutter." I get your point, but maybe something like "flutter" would indeed be a better choice.

I enjoyed this poem. Keep on writing!

I really like the this poem. It displays how much time and effort we put into our writing. This how it feels when you end a story that you put so much time and effort one. The long nights and sore fingers and hand cramps but its worth it in the end. It made me thing about how I put all lot of time into my story (its not done yet) but I its like we're talking with our characters even if they're not real.

Hey there AndName, Katja here to review your poem about writing. As with all of my reviews please feel free to disregard any and all comments or suggestions if you find them to be unhelpful. That being said, lets get into the review~

Overall Thoughts

I think this poem is VERY clever. That's why i couldn't resist reviewing even though you already had a few. Seeing as most of us here are writers, we can all *most likely* relate. I'll admit when i first read the, "Calibri 16 pt. Font-That’s what I use for Pages" really confused me and I thought for a second that you forgot to edit that out or something.... I feel pretty silly now to be totally honest!

My Favorite part was,

The screen brightness scaled just right and the lights

Turned on at night

Sit back, frown at the Screen like it’s a

Broken Thing

Because the Story

Is

Over

The giddy run and stutter of my heart

Little people exist on Paper and 1’s and 0’s

I like this poem. It was a good idea that was written well.

The 8th/9th line was a bit confusing to read.

"Mouth Dry and tea glass Empty an Inconvenience

To Push through"

You could maybe use a comma, so it says "Empty, an Inconvenience", which I think would be easier to read.

My favourite section is:

"Last brilliant Idea

Sound unheard, just Drowned out

Frantic clacking of keys long since forgotten

Last Word, last Punctuation

Shift, Shift, Shift.

THE END in Bold "

I also really like the ending.
Thanks for writing

EverLight here with a review! This review is not intended to offend or hurt you or make your novel or poem seem bad, but be warned you may feel offended anyway.

First Impression
I love it!

Nitpicks & Grammar

In this sentence you forgot to combine the word in and to-

Racing of Time as I close in to the goal

Sit back, frown at the Screen like it’s a