Calibri 16 pt. Font
That’s what I use for Pages
Paragraphs and Chapters as I Fly
Across the keyboard, fingertips sore
Like the time I played the 12 string
The screen brightness scaled just right and the lights
Turned on at night
Mouth Dry and tea glass Empty an Inconvenience
To Push through
The giddy run and stutter of my heart as I say what he said
To her
And we laugh together about a joke in my head
Little people exist on Paper and 1’s and 0’s
Pencil drawings and the hurried flow of marker Pen notes
Racing of Time as I close in to the goal
The last 20
World gone, the last Chapter
Last brilliant Idea
Sound unheard, just Drowned out
Frantic clacking of keys long since forgotten
Last Word, last Punctuation
Shift, Shift, Shift.
THE END in Bold
Sit back, frown at the Screen like it’s a
Broken Thing
Because the Story
Is
Over
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abachmann here!!
Wow this is really cool. I think what you did here is very smart. I think what your meaning here is how you feel that your story is alive and breathing. My favorite part of your story is the end, where you say
“Sit back, frown at the Screen like it’s a
Broken Thing
Because the Story
Is
Over”
I love that!!!
I have one tiny nitpick...
You added a lot of capital letters on the middle of sentences. Maybe this is intentional, maybe not!!
Other then that, I love this! It perfectly portrays being a author!! Amazing job!!
-abachmann
abachmann here!!
Wow this is really cool. I think what you did here is very smart. I think what your meaning here is how you feel that your story is alive and breathing. My favorite part of your story is the end, where you say
“Sit back, frown at the Screen like it’s a
Broken Thing
Because the Story
Is
Over”
I love that!!!
I have one tiny nitpick...
You added a lot of capital letters on the middle of sentences. Maybe this is intentional, maybe not!!
Other then that, I love this! It perfectly portrays being a author!! Amazing job!!
-abachmann
Hey, there! This was a fun poem to read. Nothing too serious exerts the reader's brain while taking in the beauty of this creative work, which is nice for a change. Now, I like serious poems myself, but this one is different - lighter and easier to grasp. It's a nice change.
Keep on writing! 
I think it's cool how you've captured the joys and also some of the struggles of writing. You've shown the passion that the writer has as he/she puts their story into words. You also put in some personal touches that I really like, such as mentioning "Like the time I played the 12 string," and "Mouth dry and tea glass empty, an inconvenience to push through". It reflects your personality a little bit, but there's not so much of it in there that few others can relate, so it's a nice touch.
I think I have to agree with what's already been written on your use of the word "stutter." I get your point, but maybe something like "flutter" would indeed be a better choice.
I enjoyed this poem.
I really like the this poem. It displays how much time and effort we put into our writing. This how it feels when you end a story that you put so much time and effort one. The long nights and sore fingers and hand cramps but its worth it in the end. It made me thing about how I put all lot of time into my story (its not done yet) but I its like we're talking with our characters even if they're not real.
Hey there AndName, Katja here to review your poem about writing. As with all of my reviews please feel free to disregard any and all comments or suggestions if you find them to be unhelpful. That being said, lets get into the review~
Overall Thoughts
I think this poem is VERY clever. That's why i couldn't resist reviewing even though you already had a few. Seeing as most of us here are writers, we can all *most likely* relate. I'll admit when i first read the, "Calibri 16 pt. Font-That’s what I use for Pages" really confused me and I thought for a second that you forgot to edit that out or something.... I feel pretty silly now to be totally honest!
My Favorite part was,
I love how right, lights, and night all rhymed whether intentional or not. It felt very rhythmic and added a nice touch to your poem.
And this is something most of us can relate to!
Suggestions
I have to admit, due to the style and grammar choices, which you clarified were intentional, I had a hard time picking anything to critique. So, here's what I came up with~
I feel like "stutter" is not fitting, perhaps flutter would sound better? It's hard for me to associate stuttering with a heart beat since the connotation immediately makes me think of stuttering in the aspect of speech... Just a thought.
I wasn't too sure what you meant by 1's and 0's?
Summary
I really liked you poem and it was really fitting for a website full of people who love writing! I loved the style above all and it matched well with the poem's inspiration. Well-done.
I hope my review was helpful and I look forward to reading more of your work soon,
~Katja
I like this poem. It was a good idea that was written well.
The 8th/9th line was a bit confusing to read.
"Mouth Dry and tea glass Empty an Inconvenience
To Push through"
You could maybe use a comma, so it says "Empty, an Inconvenience", which I think would be easier to read.
My favourite section is:
"Last brilliant Idea
Sound unheard, just Drowned out
Frantic clacking of keys long since forgotten
Last Word, last Punctuation
Shift, Shift, Shift.
THE END in Bold "
I also really like the ending.
Thanks for writing
EverLight here with a review! This review is not intended to offend or hurt you or make your novel or poem seem bad, but be warned you may feel offended anyway.
First Impression
I love it!
Nitpicks & Grammar
In this sentence you forgot to combine the word in and to-
In this sentence you have a mis-capitalized word-
The word screen doesn't need to be capitalized.
Other then those, you have no other nitpicks.
Style & Flow
Just one thing-your usage of capitalization threw me off, and interrupted the flow of this poem for me.
Overall you did an excellent job.
EverLight Out