Young Writers Society

Beautiful! This palindrome shows an admirable talent. It takes a lot of concentrated, organized thinking, and not anyone could pull it off this well. Great job.

This work talks about how a person feels empty when their love is rejected, and that's something which many people experience, so the words you've written are widely relatable. However, I will interject that even tho a person may feel this way, it doesn't mean that there's nothing left to life. Still, you've shown us the emotions of the narrator, entering their mind to display their pain. Good work. Keep it up!

Hey niteowl
Okay, so first of all, this is a really nice poem! I think that your attempt at a palindrome was wonderful! It was smooth and really touching. The way you did it, was like a story. First this heartbroken person feels as if they will never love again and that their special someone is the only one for them. But the story flips, and this person realizes that they were foolish to think that and I feel like their heart is healed in the end. It was really cool to read this!

The only thing I would fix is using more expressive words. Right now it's like an outsiders look of this person's story. But if you use words like heart wrenching or something like that, it would bring the reader into that persons narrative. It depends on what you want, but in my opinion would make the poem even better.

I really enjoyed your story! I hope you keep writing poems like this!

- Stellarjay