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Re: The Tales Of Derpy Link: Chapter 1 The beginning
Hey there! You have such an amusing start to your story, and something about it just pulled me in. Although the beginning sentence is rather long and holds a lot ...
Jun 3, 2021 -
Re: Weeping Blood Book 1 Battlefield~Prologue
Hey there! I saw one of your chapters in the green room, so I decided I should start reading at the beginning. First of all, I'm getting the idea you're ...
Jun 2, 2021 -
Re: lofty thinking
Hey there! This is a great poem! It flows very nicely and just has a smooth feel that moves the reader through continuously without awkward hitches. The senses you have ...
Jun 2, 2021 -
Re: you are a writer
Hey there! Lovely job on this poem. I like how the body of the poem itself explains the title, or rather, the title explains the body. The poem never mentions ...
Jun 1, 2021 -
Re: Late night talk
Hey, there! Nice poem here. I like how you've conveyed the idea that two people can develop a strong connection just through texting. While this is obviously not the ideal ...
Dec 1, 2020 -
Re: Out of this World <3
Hey, there! This is a cool piece of art. I have to say, it's really more visual art than literary, at least in this format. So I like your design, ...
Dec 1, 2020 -
Re: stoned
Hey, there. I saw your work in the green room and decided to look it over. First of all, I will say that this sounds more like a pointed short ...
Nov 17, 2020 -
Re: corners of the universe
Hey, there! This is a cool poem. I think we can all relate to that feeling of vastness, yet wondering what it all even means. Your wording is simple, but ...
Nov 17, 2020 -
Re: i found my true love in a youtube ad
Hey, there! This is really cool and unique! Your perspective is great, and I like how you incorporate the pain a person experiences when not knowing how to spell or ...
Nov 9, 2020 -
Re: swamp thing
Hey, there. This is very creative and imaginative. I really like the library imagery. You've also given us a mental picture of endlessness by using the term "labyrinthine" and by ...
Oct 19, 2020 -
Re: The Battle for 2020
Oh. Wow. Great. Absolutely great. I laughed out loud in the library. I love how you worked so many 2020 things in there, or if they weren't necessarily 2020 exclusive ...
Oct 13, 2020 -
Re: Collision
Hi, it's me again. :) Another good poem here. It's got such a somber theme, but it's arranged artfully. Your capitalization is proper, in that it occurs at the beginning ...
Sep 30, 2020 -
Re: i am ill.
Hello, there. Thanks for contributing this poem. Wow, what skill to incorporate the names of medicines into a poetic work! Who would have that of that? (I mean, you obviously...LOL) ...
Sep 30, 2020 -
Re: oppressive nature
Greetings! I am happy to review your poem. First off, I like the structured feel of it. Each stanza begins with the same line, and that gives a great sense ...
Sep 29, 2020 -
Re: Please help me with my story descriptions
Greetings! I'm happy to help by reviewing your ideas. The first thing I want to say is that I noticed some grammatical errors that could be improved, and if you ...
Sep 29, 2020
