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Virgil

  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, Teen Fiction Re: Annie and James-Part 1

    This is Yams here for a review on review day! The first thing I noticed is the lack of punctuation/ or grammar errors. You start off with a lot of ...

    Jan 31, 2016
  • Poetry » Romantic, General Re: Should I Tell?

    This is Yams here for a review! I felt like this poem was the cliche love/hurt poem. "Oh my heart is tearing over him oh no what do I do?" ...

    Jan 30, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, Supernatural Re: To Tame A Wolf

    This is Yams here for a review! I don't know if I like this or dislike this so far, but here we go. God, your characters are kind of annoying ...

    Jan 24, 2016
  • Poetry » Realistic, Other Re: x

    This is Yams here for a review. I think you could've made it snappier at her if you're actually angry at her but I can't judge because I do not ...

    Jan 21, 2016
  • Poetry » Realistic, Other Re: Timeless

    Hey Aura, I'm here for a quick review. I liked the formatting you used but you kind of stopped it at the end and used something else and that's just ...

    Jan 16, 2016
  • Poetry » Lyrical, Realistic Re: I want to remove the world's pain

    This is Atsmai here for a review! First off, I like the style you wrote it in. Props to you for that. Now, I can actually help and stuff. My ...

    Jan 2, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Fanfiction, Supernatural Re: Werewolf, You Stole My Heart - Chapter 1 - "The Pink Hair Gives You Away, Dear"

    This is Atsmai here for a review! I don't see why this has been so passed up, because I like this, but here are some ways to help improve the ...

    Dec 30, 2015
  • Short Story » Realistic, Romantic Re: The Three Times I Fell In Love

    This is Atsmai here for a review! First off, I like the format that you used. It's kind of choppy with the flow somehow. I just don't feel like you're ...

    Dec 30, 2015
  • Short Story » Realistic, General Re: Goodbye, My Love

    This is Atsmai here for a review! I don't really know if this what it would actually be like. I just don't think someone would write something this heartwarming or ...

    Dec 30, 2015
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Literature Re: It's Not The Same

    Atsmai here for a quick review on review day! First off, at the end of the poem there's a period, but really, you should use punctuation, or don't use it ...

    Dec 30, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: Godslayer Chapter One + Two

    Alright, this is Atsmai here for a review! The first thing I noticed is that there are places where there should be capitalizations, like... "we have to try, these demons ...

    Dec 30, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Narrative, Teen Fiction Re: My name is Winter, I'm popular but I don't think I want to be. (Prologue)

    Okay, the title was the thing that really intriuged me here, this is Atsmai here for a review! First off, okay, your character is the cliche rich girl, is this ...

    Dec 30, 2015
  • Short Story » Supernatural, General Re: The Measure of a Hero

    Atsmai here on review day for a review! First off, instead of saying the "world's only superhero retired", say his name instead? Because it would make more sense to say ...

    Dec 30, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: Wild Fyre- Prologue

    Atsmai here for a review on review day! Okay, the first thing I noticed is that you write in third person with judgement. Unless there is a specific person telling ...

    Nov 29, 2015
  • Poetry » General, Lyrical Re: A Haiku and Tanka

    I guess I'm here to review this since I stumbled upon it. The Haiku: I don't really understand what you're trying to make the reader feel, that the brightest colors ...

    Oct 25, 2015


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