TheOffBroadwayAuthor

Good job! You've worked through the problem you had with being wordy and slow-paced. Your story is still long, but it's not boring, and I enjoyed it! Way to go ...

I really like this! I love what you did with the rhyme, and your rhythm is very natural. Close rhymes are a tricky thing, and you used them well. My ...

As someone who has recovered from bipolar, this is accurate. Mania is such a hard thing to deal with, because you know it's wrong, you know the risks, but damn ...

This is great! I love the theme of how abuse can create abusers, and I can see how afraid the speaker is for their father. I like that you left ...

I like where this is going! Cortez's chase after fame gives me an idea of how this will end. I like the Shayene is still supportive, even though Cortez is ...

I like this! You paint a very distinct picture of how winter is at your house. I like your choice to not use punctuation, it gives the poem an aimless ...

Nice twist! I genuinely didn't see it coming. I have a couple critiques, though. The "Then one day we were playing 'chase'..." paragraph is very slow, you might want to ...

I'm going to review 6 and 7 in this comment. I think the arc you have of paying consequences for lying on social media is good. If only those people ...

Nice job! You established Noah's character very well. I have two critiques: "'Where do you live?' Oh no! It was the dreaded question! He would have to tell him in ...

This was great! I love how you managed to stretch a single moment into an entire story, I love how romantic your prose is, and I love how you made ...

Yes! Gratitude! My therapy senses are tingling. Jokes aside, I love how you focused on simple, household objects. A lot of gratitude poems focus on nature, so it's nice to ...

This gave me chills. The idea that someone could be so traumatized that he lost all sense of right and wrong is so real and so, so scary. I like ...

This is so cute! Your characters are very likable. I'd advise you to read through this a couple times and edit it. Your prose is a bit shaky, and there's ...

Good job! I'm definitely interested to see what happens next. I like that your narrator is detailed and precise, trying to create some sort of routine in his chaotic and ...

Good job with this poem! I know a lot of people who fit this description, including myself. We want to hide the bad parts of ourselves and show the great ...