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ThatOneGuy2002

  • Short Story » Dramatic, Realistic Re: The Dimmest Star

    Hey, this was a cool story. I like the way you told it from a dogs point of veiw, the world around and the people in its life. I kind ...

    Thu Apr 04, 2019 4:57 pm
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Health Re: That Boy

    This is good, and a good representation of the sad reality of what has become of todays society. Nowadays it is rare to find someone who cares for others more ...

    Thu Apr 04, 2019 4:49 pm
  • Poetry » Realistic, Dramatic Re: isolation

    This is cool. I kind of see it as an insight to this novel that will never be written. It reminds me a bit of myself (I suppose it is ...

    Thu Apr 04, 2019 1:57 pm
  • Poetry » Romantic, General Re: True Love

    Hey, I liked this. I like how it was simpler in word choice, but envoked some of the feelings you would find in a complex poem. It was a pretty ...

    Thu Apr 04, 2019 1:31 pm
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: the wanting of words? words left wanting? living words? - title yet to be decided

    Hey, I just wanted to say, I love this work. It actually reminds me much of my own style, concentrating a bigger meaning into a complex array of words, good ...

    Sun Feb 24, 2019 4:49 am
  • Novel / Chapter » Mystery / Suspense, General Re: The Magical Musician---1

    Hey, this chapter seemed alright. I just had a few things you may consider that could improve the story. Firstly, look for off sounding sentences, such as one in the ...

    Sat Feb 23, 2019 9:32 pm
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Heartstrings

    Niiice, I loved it great job :D. As for the category, I think it floats somewhere near lyrical. I dont have much to correct, although perhaps the flow needed a ...

    Sat Nov 24, 2018 7:20 pm
  • Poetry » Other, Other Re: When a Childhood is Over

    I like this, it definitely hits some key points in what many do as adults, losing the fun in everything, and at the same time losing meaning. Definitely a problem ...

    Fri Nov 23, 2018 6:02 pm
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Dramatic Re: Banished (Chapter 1)

    This is a nice story. I like the setup, and especially the plot, an awesome storyline! Im pretty interested to see what becomes of this settlement. However, I think you ...

    Fri Nov 23, 2018 5:51 pm
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: Lotus flower

    Hey, good work. Thats a wonderfull message to send out, especially in todays world, where ones flaws are all too often blown out of proportion by others, making someone beautiful ...

    Tue Nov 20, 2018 8:06 pm
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: Poem by Roger McGough. The Sound Collector

    Awesome poem. I felt perhaps the description was a tiny bit different from what the poem is actually about, less about silence and more of sound and the descriptions of ...

    Tue Nov 20, 2018 8:00 pm
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Lightening Mountain

    Hey, first off, awesome poem! I love the imagery. However, I think I spotted a few areas of which improving would make it all together better. I felt that perhaps ...

    Mon Nov 19, 2018 8:31 pm
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: the boy

    Wow, thats awesome. I love the reality of this, unsure if something said really represents whats inside, totally relatable. I like the slight romance about it. I dont really have ...

    Mon Nov 19, 2018 8:11 pm
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Health Re: dark

    Awesome, I think I can relate to this, the violent, greedy, selfish side of myself, which makes me forget reason, throw mercy down the drain. I understand what your talking ...

    Mon Nov 19, 2018 3:01 am
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Winter

    Hey, first off, good choice of topic. Winter is one of the best things to write on, the beauty of the ice, the chills of snow, just a topic waiting ...

    Mon Nov 19, 2018 2:47 am


Half the work that is done in this world is to make things appear what they are not.
— Elias Root Beadle