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dark

by fishsashimi


i feel something in me

like a dark force clawing and biting

it wants to get out

when i walk

or talk

or eat

it needs to eat

so it devours my feelings

it mashes them

molds them into a new me

one that i dont like

that others dont like

because it isnt me

i seem a bit more dark inside

like a demon had tortured me

but no 

it still tortured me

when i walked

or talked

or ate

i think i can handle this on my own

but they keep asking to help

“i dont need them” i think

but the darkness within thinks that

“you should be fine” it tells me

taking my brain and playing with it

like its some instrument

eventually it controls my body

making me seem a bit off

but i am far off

they just dont know

how it feels to be molded and shaped

by the darkness i have

within.

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Mon Nov 19, 2018 3:09 am
clancy wrote a review...



okay, I got chills. I love this (it feels so weird to say i love it, because really the feelings suck) but it's so amazingly written and I can relate so much.
the only thing I see that I would change is the third line
''I wants to get out'' I know it was probably a typo (the S at the end of want shouldn't be there) but I honestly don't see anything else wrong with it so I thought I'd mention it. XD
I've written poetry with a similar subject matter and boy, you did it so much better. I look forward to reading more from you.
stay alive fam.




fishsashimi says...


thanks for pointing that out m8



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Mon Nov 19, 2018 3:01 am
ThatOneGuy2002 wrote a review...



Awesome, I think I can relate to this, the violent, greedy, selfish side of myself, which makes me forget reason, throw mercy down the drain. I understand what your talking about. If this is based on reality, I just want to say, it gets better. You are in control, and the choices you make dont only effect you, but others around you, and you can not only help yourself unchain the bonds of darkness, but others around you as well. Anyways, awesome poem, and I cant wait to read more. :3




fishsashimi says...


thanks!
i was trying to go for more of a depressed, irrational side of me rather than a greedy side but now that you mention it i kinda see where you got that from!





Haha, actually I was referring more to my experiences to my demonic side. XD




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