Hey writer! Here I am to review your lovely poem.
I love the way you structured the poem, with all couplets besides the one line
It is a really good way to draw a lot of attention to that one line, which functions as a transition in attitude in your poem.But the weather will get better.
My one criticism of this poem is that some of the rhymes feel forced. For example when you rhyme "colder" with "shoulder", I don't understand why you feel it more in your shoulder than any other body part, so it feels liie you just chose that word because it rhymes and not because it adds to the meaning or tone of the poem.
I would also say there are some serious grammatical issues in a few lines, but I'm going to trust that the previous reviewers covered that enough.
Overall, this was a delightful poem, and its structure made it unique and enjoyable. Never stop writing !
~alliyah
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