StupidSoup

Its great that you've thought to try something new! You can only get better when practicing diversity in style and genre! While I do admire your bravery in jumping headfirst ...

The fact that this poem is so short does the work justice. The imagery is crisp and concise and illustrates your meaning perfectly. I do notice a slight hiccup in ...

There are a lot of really good ideas here. You do a great job of evoking emotion with your writing. You are very straight forwards with the events in this ...

This story would be best characterized as a strong narrative handicapped by multiple grammatical mistakes (syntax etc) and 2d characters. I love your "slice of life" way of writing and ...

You cannot write a poem while only looking at one aspect of emotion. Simply put, you cannot write an evocative piece (such as what you aimed to do here) by ...

Thanks for the invitation! You have a really unique idea. I haven't seen many poems written in this form. However, this style does come with its own restrictions and challenges. ...

Hello! First off, you basically have a meter so either I'm reading something wrong or you need to give this thing it's rhythm. For starters you can replace words like ...

Heya bud. Typing this with a broken finger so it may have some errors but bear with me. The first thing I noticed is the lack of capitalization at the ...

Everything about this begs a rhyme scheme. A lot of it can be cut. Surviving only So that one day it can escape it's icy cage And that one day ...

Hi. I love your short clipped sentences. I feel like it adds a nice sense of fragmentation to the poem. I also really enjoyed how simple it was. A lot ...

Hi. I love your writing style. The stanzas flow very nicely and you have a very strong emotional theme. However, there are a few rookie mistakes you make. The first ...

Hi. I really like how deep this feels. It sounds like your talking about an actual friend you have. Anyway, I couldn't find to many errors in the poem overall ...

Hi. First off, you have a few punctuation errors in the first half of the story. I would attempt to use bbcode quotations to show this to you but I ...

Hi. This poem is mechanically sound. Your flow is nice and your word choice is really good. However the entire poem is one long piece of imagery making it feel ...

Hi. First off, I feel like it'd be a good idea to break this into stanzas. It'd be much easier on the eye. Secondly, though the middle parts of you ...