StoryWeaver13

Hey there Yese! And welcome to YWS! I'll give you a fair warning and say that I am quite picky when it comes to poems, so don't take any criticisms ...

Welcome to YWS! Actually, this was a very promising beginning. Your story is saturated with personality, dripping with a dry and clever humor that works very well for bringing the ...

This piece is pretty well-written, but lacking in any unique concept. I think we all kind of write about writing, particularly when we can think of nothing else due to ...

Hey Louis! Well I have mixed emotions about this poem, honestly. Conceptually I think you've chosen something that's been done, but not so often that you can't make it your ...

Hey there raven! Okay, so I will forewarn that I am a very picky poet, particularly when it comes to the nuances of love poems. They are done with such ...

Hey, Ivy! So I'm hoping your username is that of your murderous character only for creative licensing reasons and not because you do, in fact, relate far too much to ...

Hey there, littleauthor. (sidenote: your username is really adorable) Anyway, this was an endearing poem, and very well-written for your age especially! Although simple in its presentation it has a ...

Wow, welcome to YWS, and color me intrigued! This really is a promising beginning - the tone is something close to flawless, the rhythm stable and conversational, your words natural. ...

Hey! So I'll start with some more specific corrections or recommendations, and then give you a broader analysis. Below the husky moon you lie[,] You don't take a breath [I ...

I love this. I tend to have a problem with poems that are redundant in their format, but I think that you made this work to your in a way ...

Hey there! First of all, I love your username. This simply had to be said beforehand. Second, I realize that this is somewhat of an older poem, and while I ...

Hey there! Well I'll review this piece-by-piece, and then give you a synopsis at the end to try to help you out. Advised corrections are in double brackets. Being just ...

Hey! Well, due to the length of this, I'll just analyze it line-by-line, and then give you more general impressions at the end. Walk if I were to walk out ...

Hey there! Okay, so I'll start with some nitpicks and then expound upon the general idea. The first page and paragraph are arguably some of the most important parts of ...

Hey there! Okay, so just to warn you, I am a harsh reviewer of poetry. You've been warned. So a lot of things on this. First of all, I'd seriously ...