StoryWeaver13

Hey, welcome to YWS! And to welcome you here, I may pick on you slightly (I'm a poetry snob). First and foremost, I like that you chose a free-verse style ...

"He thought he was invincible,/That nothing he did could stop him." [[I would take out "he did" from this...]] "Whispering in his ear,/The reality he refused to believe." [[I would ...

I like the somber, pondering attitude of the protagonist; even though some of the imagery is a little overused (ie. "wind caresses you with soft fingers," etc.), you manage to ...

I really like some of the concepts you have, but I do have problem with the structuring of the lines and sentences. There were places where it felt a little ...

Really cool...I've always had an appreciation for pagan/wiccan culture, despite the typical negative "demonic" stigma that's been so unfairly (and incorrectly) attached. I wish this article was longer

Interesting rhyme scheme...I kind of have a love/hate feeling with it, honestly, but that's just a matter of personal opinion. The general theme of this is realllyyyy cool, but I ...

Meh...the subject matter and stylistic approach are a little old-hat, in my opinion. This is written well but without originality (and I say this of close to 75% of the ...

I'm sorry, but this is spectacular. I'm sorry because I hate to come and review with so little to critique, but this really needs little more than positive acknowledgement. The ...

The flow of this feels very...stilted? It feels rather dry and lacks an emotional hook, so I think that the problem really lies therein with the fact that it just ...

*sighh* Another poem about depression...how depressing... This was actually written relatively well, but the subject is most definitely beaten dead and dragged too far. We just hear this stuff all ...

This has really nice imagery, and I personally like it. I feel as though the opening lacks the same intrigue, however, and would advise possibly finding another way of beginning ...

"I am wonderful at hiding it, aren't I? You'll never see it again, love. But I'll feel it until I'm old and I've forgotten our [[your?]] name." Well, this was ...

Slavery stories always break my heart...but remember to show the story, not tell! It felt too dry and read more like a textbook than a story in many places. Don't ...

The first reviewer was spot-on when saying that syntax was a bit of an issue, but sentence structure was really the only thing wrong with this piece. It really is ...

Hey there! Okay, so first the silly technical stuff... I like "A *Spell* to Make You Smarter," actually. Not a big deal but that's my opinion. :D Add a dash ...