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I agree with the other reviewer you should probably change the first line but the poem in itself has no real problems.
I really like these last lines:
'twirl and flourish one last time
before the curtain falls.'
They're very beautiful and fitting to end the poem with. Overall it's very well-written and I like it a lot.
~wishuponafallenstar~
This has really nice imagery, and I personally like it. I feel as though the opening lacks the same intrigue, however, and would advise possibly finding another way of beginning your poem; it's not a bad first line, but it lacks any sort of hook or uniqueness.
Other than that, this is a nice poem. It has a great rhythm and it unravels naturally before it hits diminuendo. Nice job.