StoneHeart

Ouch, sounds like it must have been a bad, bad day. The day I heard my dad had died was a pretty bad one for me . . . But ...

Okay, now I've seen pieces like this, you know what they where? Dialogue practice sheets. Because that's what this is, pure dialogue. I've seen some of your writing before and ...

Okay, so here I am for a quick review! Now, the main problem I noticed in here is the way that you tried to mix older knightly jargon with present ...

Hey Champ, here I am with your review! First off, my thoughts: Good work, it was rather strangely written, the characters were different, and then whole thing had a rather ...

Ah, okay, so nice work. For a prologue this was really good, not much backing it up though. Now, I'd advise you to find a better name than Riley Evans ...

Okay, so this was a-m-a-z-i-n-g! I love the originality, it really caught me and threw me off a cliff! Amazing, amazing, amazing! The whole feel of it all makes me ...

Okay, impressive work here! This reminds me of Guinea's world, very good, very original, and very interesting. Of course I could be wrong! I love how everything feels so different. ...

Okay! So nice work here, I love your style, and I love the names! They're cool! This gives me the feel I get when I'm reading a story with a ...

Okay, so hey! Technically (Just a so-you-know-this) this should belong in the Forums. You can post it on there and people will come at check it out, but otherwise your ...

Okay, so first off! WOW! Amazing work. I get a feeling, for some odd reason, that this should belong in narrative poetry, and not in short story. But I guess ...

Okay! The pro's! Amazing! I will say it now, amazing! The originality of it really catches me! I have a great feeling that this is going to be a very, ...

Okay, nice work! I'm thinking right now however that this is more of a poetry narrative or a novel's intro. I feel like it should be in verses, it reads ...

Ohhhkay! First off! Mega wow! The emotion, the feeling, the wording, the way you put everything! It blew my mind! Beautiful! Amazing! No words can describe this. You can soooo ...

Here's a bit of a review for you! Okay, first off! Woot, woot! Good job getting your writing out to the world, this showed the scene perfectly, the feeling of ...

Another one! Wow that's quite a review Rydia gave you there :P Nice rhyming again! Really nice. I'm no good with rhymes. That last one felt like it had a ...